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  • *Seriously I Need Everyone To Read This* (Its a Poem I got to turn in for school)

    i need to know if its good enough to turn in....will give reps...

    if i had a dream what would it be how would i handle it
    sitting here meditating, lights off, with the candles lit
    im wondering what my goals are if I'll get any chances
    take any glances away from a victim of circumstances
    deaths approaching me seems the devils coachin' me
    try getting on with life but struggles keep provokin' me
    got to stop it but my heartbeat is the only thing stoppin'
    rain dissappeared it's only the blood and tears droppin'
    growin' up to see the teenagers not making it to college
    its not their knowledge coffins are being acknowledged
    if we could stop the hate we could easily stop the crates
    filled up with innocent people blown up or killed by .38s'
    my vision of being in prison are leaven my dearly wishin'
    that me and drug incisions never have a type of collision
    if i ever pick up that needle i know that my life will crash
    mind will get picked up and moved like a tsunami's blast
    it's hard to ask for what has been asked for days and days
    am i really the only man on my knees who prays and prays
    hoping for the crazed and insane to leave go separate ways
    cause everyone knows god is lookin' for a desparate praise



    edit: my vision of being in prison are leaven my dearly wishin'
    that me and drug incisions never have a type of collision

    that line right there is from my sig KINDA i re worded it...im just tryin to make this sound good so dont think im recycling or nethin yall would call it 1o1
    Last edited by Double~A; 03-10-2005, 09:20 PM.

  • #2
    It was ok but I have seen a lot better from you even though it was a poem it was good not amazing though 7.9/10 keep it up though man...WTF?!You Meditate?! lol j/p
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    • #3
      1o1 just a poem i did in 8 minutes ( i should make it better...which i probly will before i turn it in)....thnx 4 feed homie....no i dont meditate it just seemed right to put it at the time....uppin

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      • #4
        ...*wistles and walks around looks up and noticed rep for feed checks user CP sees none*...
        *Free Agent*
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        • #5
          its def. good enough for school... for a poem... i dont think you'll have to edit it for school...
          if it was for something else i could see -some- reason to edit but its for school... good enough...
          peace~
          p.s reputize me cap'n ...
          keep it up!
          peace~
          Treasure Time

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          • #6
            tha rookie - You must spread some Reputation around before giving it to Tha_Rookie again.


            retina - thnx 4 the feed i left ya rep


            uppin

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