KIDS(new song,not audio yet)

[C*A*L]

KIDS
I woke up this morning an went straight to school
I seen this kid jonny an I hate the dude
I went to um an shoved um an then made my move
Then started choking him until his whole face turned blue
Let um up an everybody’s pointing an laughing
We had no idea he had poisonous masses
Constructing his brain, so when the boy got his ass kicked
He gave in to the tiny voices that gas him
next day, he came to school with a shotty packed
his voice made it clear, that hes leaving in a body bag
he told me shut the fuck up an cocked it back
I seen pain in his eyes when the shot-gun blast
It hit my chest an I was tossed back three feet
He started screaming none of yall should have teased me
I was lying there bleeding wheezing while im freezing
I knew id be leaving soon to greet Jesus

(Hookx2)
I don’t know what life is bringing
I don’t know what life im living
While the light is getting dim an
I cant see my sight is vivid

Now hes in a rampage shooting the place
He popped three kids in the back, two in the face
4 in the chest, cuz I made a stupid mistake
he shot lilly in the leg to loosen his rage
he told the principle back up its personal
trust me I don’t want to but I will murder you
he could give two shits if swats lurking threw
each room an the hallways, hell hurt them too
his only plot that day was reach an early casket
an take the kids with him that watched him get his assed kick
send um home to there loved ones in plastic
I guess its my fault for being such a bastard
I thought about while I was lying there dying
hearing people screaming, running and crying
with my vision fading, while something is shyning
infront of me blinding, guns blasting an sirens

(Hookx2)
I don’t know what life is bringing
I don’t know what life im living
While the light is getting dim an
I cant see my sight is vivid

News all over bodies slumped in the grass
Jonny running round school pumping a gat
I wish I knew sooner I aint fucking with that
He approached me, put another slug in my back
It Just goes to prove that karmas a bitch
Jonnys wearing Teflon he armored his ribs
only motive is going round harming the kids
But now hes slowing down, his arm pit got hit
Red dots on his krown, cops all around
Popped um four more times he dropped to the ground
Swat all around now stomping him down
Jonny let loose an popped another round
He put a bullet straight up threw his jaw kid
His body lied motionless slumped on the lawn dead
An ever since that one day jonny lost it
I still feel its my fault,cuz Im the one who caused it
(Hookx2)
I don’t know what life is bringing
I don’t know what life im living
While the light is getting dim an
I cant see my sight is vivid

[StateZFinest420]

wow, shit was pretty deep.

best shit i've seen from you ever. on the real, you need to record this. when first started reading and got a hold of the subject i thought it was gonna be mad cliche, but you definately made it interesting thru the end. flow seemed perfect when i read it, no awkward pauses and extra syllables. some nicely placed multies too.

fav bars:

"next day, he came to school with a shotty packed
his voice made it clear, that hes leaving in a body bag
he told me shut the fuck up an cocked it back
I seen pain in his eyes when the shot-gun blast"

"It hit my chest an I was tossed back three feet
He started screaming none of yall should have teased me
I was lying there bleeding wheezing while im freezing
I knew id be leaving soon to greet Jesus"

"Now hes in a rampage shooting the place
He popped three kids in the back, two in the face
4 in the chest, cuz I made a stupid mistake
he shot lilly in the leg to loosen his rage
he told the principle back up its personal
trust me I don’t want to but I will murder you
he could give two shits if swats lurking threw
each room an the hallways, hell hurt them too
his only plot that day was reach an early casket
an take the kids with him that watched him get his assed kick
send um home to there loved ones in plastic
I guess its my fault for being such a bastard"

^^^ yea basically the whole second verse, but i couldn't leave none of those bars out.

"News all over bodies slumped in the grass
Jonny running round school pumping a gat
I wish I knew sooner I aint fucking with that
He approached me, put another slug in my back"

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again, one of the best things i've read on this board or any other. now if yall know statez, yall know he aint easy with the compliments, but this piece deserves it.

[C*A*L]

thanx homie...preciate it....

[dirtemind82]

now THATS some unique shit. havent seen anybody cover this topic before and actually do it wit taste. checks dis shit gets two thumbs up from me. ya multis are perfect, nothin forced. u didnt need punches in dis cuz u delivered this perfectly wit content. cant wait for the audio homie

def keep me posted on dat.
*pulls 5 bucks out wallet*
if dis is da bside to ur album u already sold urself a single

[*VisioN*]

damn nice deep shit i was really feelin this song CAL cant wait to hear it on audio

*pulls 10 dollars out of wallet*

GIVE ME THE SINGLE ILL PAY MORE THAN DIRTEMIND!

[C*A*L]

haah thanx homies..apreciate the love...mad love an respect dogs...

[Urban]

This shit is serious. One of the best drops I seen from my niqqa checks and I see a lot of this niqqaz shit through AIM. Yall be sleepin on my dawg checks. A real deep piece, real creative, and you brought good imagery to a story. You didn't have any forced multies or anything, it sounded like everything was so natural. Good job. Props.

[C*A*L]

word thanks homie...much love to you man..appreciate it urban....

[Prime]

You didn't have any forced multies or anything, it sounded like everything was so natural.

And thats what he does best, I love it .

next day, he came to school with a shotty packed
his voice made it clear, that hes leaving in a body bag
he told me shut the fuck up an cocked it back
I seen pain in his eyes when the shot-gun blast
^Imagery, you gotta love it.

[C*A*L]

thanks homie...preaciate the love prime...

[C*A*L]

uppin yall

[Wu4Eva]

Wow.... That shit was hard and deep as fuck. Damn kid, that was ill. Had way to many tight bars to point out, topic was always on point, nothin forced, everything was consistant. You painted a picture in each bar, if you record this with a nice beat and quality it will be nice. Props C*A*L.

[C*A*L]

thanx homie...preciate the love fam...

[.::spoken:..]

you know how I feel about this bro... geniouss... PURE GENIOUSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS

[InfiniteEclipse]

unique and a story ...propz....