tell me whatcha think

[Famous420]

i havent dropped nuhtin in a long while and this like came to me.. and well no one ever read shit so if you read.. tell me what ya think

i got emotionally fatal weaknesses and i got fears//
i got profound depths of depression and i got tears//
I got unexpected confessions in me yet to confess//
i got an obsession for self expression and for success//
im accepted but i still feel like im lookn in from the outside//
i crave and thirst for attention but i still run and I hide//
each and every temptation always leads to a sin//
like every peice of paper always meets its death to a pen//(murder this paper with this pen)
sweet dreams still leave you haunted and scared by nightmares//
i couldnt buy my way to heaven even if I took the stairs// (led zeppelin "stairway to heaven")
EVIL is everywhere and its just the way that i LIVE//(evil spells live backwards)
i dont live the religious life but i do always forgive//
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well i kinda had to stop bc its time fo me to go find somethin to eat mah tummy is rumblin. im out

[skeptikal]

I gots ta say dis was deep i mena i was feelin it and it was nicely laid out good drop

[Da_Culprit]

really deep syd- i love reading your stuff- always have good vocab and thoughts
keep it up
u should post more often

outtie

[Scribe]

i replied in the other forum

[Jools]

Great Shit but at the end it seemed like you were jus tryna get threw the free.. i think you should slow down and keep talkin about the same thing cause the first 8 lines were OFF THE HOOK.....i hope you know what i mean and im not jus blowin smoke...... PEace

[L.A.]

nice nice,,,i liked the wordplay and it was deep,,,keep it up,,you should drop more often,,,,1one

[Scribe]

420 check mine out babe here

[KonKluzzion]

That was real good... i liked reading it...post some more of your stuff up...you got mad skilllz
PeAcE

[Famous420]

skep- thanks where ya been i havent see you on here lately

da culprit- thanks sweetY!! ahh yes ill try to post more TRY

jools- lol ok. thanks ... maybe its because ima HICK... just maybe lol..

scribe- thanks.. are you Lit??? cuz that link to me to Lit

lyrical assasin- yes i shall try but thanks

Kon- thankies

[Scribe]

yea I just wanted a 2nd name

[BKJ1216(2)]

deep man,
holy fuck scribe your Lit?
speaking of scribe can anyone vote on my battle with him?

[Noxshus]

NIIICE Famous, that was pretty ill I'd say...I like that evil-live thing haha I never noticed that before! Really metaphorical at parts, likin the wordplay

[Famous420]

thankies NOX!!! do ya got MSN or AOL by any chance

[Nekron9Nine]

Wow thats dope shit. Im feeling the flow and wordplay on this one. Man I just love deep shit. keep spittin the hottness...

[Noxshus]

why yes, mz famous, yes I do!
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there ya go! msn hit me up girl!