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    "Message To My Enemiez"
    chorus:
    this is a message to my enemiez/ you know the ones who always tease/ these lyrics are gonna show you what you've never stopped to see/
    this is a message to my enemiez you know the ones who never seize/ this rhyme is gonna show you why there can never be peace/
    verse 1:
    this shit happens every day to me/
    it's about enough for me to load a clip and start to spray/
    on the ignorant motherfuckers who just won't relent on what they say/
    and go about there business like they're innocent every day/
    it ain't fair how you can treat me like this/
    it ain't fari how everyone will always miss/
    the way you treat me it's just about the same if you actually beat me/
    do you people have any idea how hard it really is to brush off what everyone says?/
    i need to find some sort of solution to rid myself of this polution that you keep dumping in my mind/
    if i don't get rid of it then i will be forever blind/
    you people don't relize i'm not what i seem, i'm one of a kind/
    i don't conform to these stereotypes you lay before me/
    you should forget about everything you think you know about me/
    if this shit don't change then i'm going to be perminatley outtie/
    chorus 2x
    you rember that day i came to school with a new haircut, new clothes and hip pair of shoes?/
    i thought maybe this could change the way you treated me and your views/
    i was wrong you still treated me like the same pice of shit/
    and i can't describe the pain i felt when the relization hit/
    none of you would ever like me for what i am or who i can change to be/
    it's like you live to make a fucking mochary of me/
    i'm trying to explain to you people what you can never see/
    i'm just trying to be all i can be but the problem is i'm not doing it for me/
    the problem is that i'm doing it for you/
    i coud hold me breath till i turned blue before i'd change your view/
    this is what i'm tellin' you and you better listen/
    otherwise someon is going to wind up missin/
    each time you say stuff to me i feel like i'm being thrown into a position/
    where the only way to come out alive is submission/
    i'm telling your right now that my struggles better get some fuckign recognition/
    chorus 3x
    so this is it this is the end/
    this is what this is is really suposed to intend/
    you can either be my enemy or my friend/
    the choice is yours to choose wisle/
    because it just may lead to your demise/
    it all comes back to this one simple message/
    there is going to be no more playing around/
    if you keep treating me the way you do your going down/
    i'm sick and tired of it the next shit you say your gettin hit/
    and if it happens then it's your fucking fault i'm in this fit/
    you could've stopped all of it ages ago/
    now i'm never going to able to let go/
    but for my sake i want you to know/
    that if you keep pressing my buttons your ass is gonna go/
    chorus 1x
    this is the end you better take this into consideration too, for my sake, and not yours yours
    Last edited by BKJ1216(2); 04-15-2003, 07:41 PM.
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    come on please?
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    • #3
      hott shit dawg good job i liked itt allot
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      • #4
        yo man i was really feelin that shit dawg i had it in my head an 2 pac was spittin it an it was like he wrote it,very impressed man very impressed,keep it up man

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        • #5
          thanx man that's just what i was hoping for
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          • #6
            i'll be recording it soon don't worry, i jsut have to find a way to fix my voice so i don't sound retarded
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            • #7
              yo please some more people post your feed back
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              • #8
                If it sucks that bad you can say so.
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                • #9
                  tight shit dawg,but i think the flow went a bit off in the last verse.
                  except of that,i was really feelin' ya' lyric,keep it on!

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                  • #10
                    I meant to change that last verse like that cause it's a bit different then the last two, I guess I better record it so you know what I mean.
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                    • #11
                      i was feeling it big time.....i like it.. about t ofind a chrous to my shit....Yall *****z check out my shit titled Dont Judge Me
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