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  • Hello, new to the board, name: profile NEED FEEDBACK PLZ

    Hello all, im new to the board. I registered before under the name vito but (stupid me), I got confused about the jason getting paid shit HAHAHA 2;-{}2 I guess ur ok Jason 3;-)3

    Anyway, I come here very often, im a big hiphop fanatic and I decided to post one of my raps (started experimenting a while ago). Im dutch so I dont know every english word 3;-)3 hallo alle nederlanders, hoezie?

    I need some feedback. I hope somebody is kind enuf to give me helpfull feedback instead of some of the hating I see here on the board. I cant use useless things like: U suck, or fuck this thread or whatever.

    If u got time plz comment on my flow, delivery, lyrics and voice.
    be honest but if u dont like it plz explain why.

    I bought me a cheap mic, but doesnt sound to bad, its not studio quality though.

    I got some good reps from my envirement and some bad (more good then bad). And im actually getting curious if I can rap a bit or not.
    So I guess the people who could advise me is ppl from d12world.com

    Heres the link to my track (will be posting more if I get good replys, If I get to much bad raps maybe ill sell my mic 3;-)3 ):

    Redefinition (http://p-r-o.dmusic.com/)

    My artist name is profile, im no gangsta, im no wanksta, im just me and heres the lyrics to the track:

    Redefinition

    here we go...

    Profile...

    here we go...

    Every minute of the day I have top notch lyrics in my brain/
    I am literaly insane/
    Other rappers are in pain/
    When they know, all the work they did for years was in vain

    No disrespect but rap is gonna start from scratch
    I am getting sick of the guntalk and the hoodrats

    Im like a sponge and I need a outlet for all this shit to flow/
    Thats the way I expose a part of my soul

    Yo 50, listen up real good/
    Selling drugs is way better then spreading a good image of ur hood/
    Have remorse for your actions, thats what you should/
    Have your mind focust on living and not on the loot/
    Im not gonna lecture u anymore cuz im not in the mood
    Just be more humble like you should
    I heard enuf of the bling bling talk/
    The I stayed in the pin talk
    At least im keeping it real/
    I dont need to conceal no nothing/
    Im playing straight/
    No bluffin/
    Hardcore till I end up in my motherfucking coffin

    I am/
    Hardcore to the bone/
    Ready to claim the throne/
    Immortal from flesh and bone/
    Soon worldwide known motherfuckers

    I am/
    Hardcore to the bone/
    Ready to claim the throne/
    Immortal from flesh and bone/
    Soon worldwide known

    Im a lyrical canon/
    got more skillz then Nas and Jay combined
    Im straight fire/
    But I havent been signed/
    Its my desire for rap to be redefined
    Any contract under 1 million will be declined/
    Becuz im one of a kind/
    Not one of a dozen/
    I sit down lyric tossin/
    Coming up with the greatest shit u ever heard/
    Im the best did that motherfucking thought occured?
    I may be dissin a lot of rappers in this song/
    But I respect every one of them/
    The rappers I really dont like dont deserve my motherfucking words/
    Their names need not to be mentioned/
    Im like a shepard/ A boss/ a leader / chubby doctor / president / Capi di tuti capi/ You copy? Buy a copy / I got my own flava
    compared to me, everybodys flow is sloppy/

    I am/
    Hardcore to the bone/
    Ready to claim the throne/
    Immortal from flesh and bone/
    Soon worldwide known

    yeah...
    you know what I am....
    let me repeat it one more time for yall....

    I am/
    Hardcore to the bone/
    Ready to claim the throne/
    Immortal from flesh and bone/
    Soon worldwide known motherfuckers

    most of the rappers try to be me and they dont even know me yet/
    But their not me/
    Im the perfect rapper/ if something like that would ever excist
    I would be able to guide everybody through the fog and the mist
    Stop the beef becuz its making me pissed
    Lots of souls lost by making a useless fist
    Get the losers dismissed/
    Clean the rap game up/
    And to the guys beefin for record sales/
    SHUT THE FUCK UP

    Drop the gats/ drop the tecs/ drop the AKīs/ drop the Macīs/AR 15 / Desert eagle / tec nine
    Drop all the shit get in line
    Its my time to shine/
    With genuine talent/
    How I got it is irrelevant
    Stop giving rap a bad name/
    Stop rapping for the bitches and the fame/
    Stop rapping and stop fucking up the game/
    Ok jermaine?
    Ow damn I didnt wanted to say names of rappers I didnt like/
    But some cats just shouldnt hold a mic/
    right?

    I am/
    Hardcore to the bone/
    Ready to claim the throne/
    Immortal from flesh and bone/
    Soon worldwide known

    I tell you what I am
    I repeat it one more time, right....

    I am/
    Hardcore to the bone/
    Ready to claim the throne/
    Immortal from flesh and bone/
    Soon worldwide known motherfuckers

    Soon worldwide known

    remember my name.....

    profile.....

    yeah.....
    Last edited by profile; 03-17-2005, 01:37 PM.
    Profile, been buckwild with my style for a while!

  • #2
    offbeat

    Ow and btw....I know I am offbeat at some parts. But I know I can do better, and I pick it up soon enuf in the track, I can redo the shit and make it all work, but this was one of my best versions so far. Im still experimenting with the mic and stuff.
    Profile, been buckwild with my style for a while!

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    • #3
      pretty good, though u should add some effects and some shit and dont do the chorus like 6 times differently. just make 1 good chorus and add it to your song.
      btw from what country ur from?

      o yeah check out my shit here leave some shit:

      http://www.d12world.com/board/showthread.php?t=183729

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      • #4
        Im from the netherlands man. U know. Flowers, cheese and weed. (stereotypes 3;-)3 )
        U know, the country where proof is spending dollars without feeling pressure. 2;-{}2
        Profile, been buckwild with my style for a while!

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        • #5
          heheh guess where im living: Netherlands too :P

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          • #6
            Very good for a beginner.
            Keep practicing with your flow.
            Lyrics don't really need any work besides upping your vocabulary a bit.
            You've got a nice deep good rapping voice so can't really comment on the voice.
            Very good for beginning

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            • #7
              Come on guys......75 views and only 2 persons who reply........ REPLY PLZ.......U CONSIDER IT SHIT?? FINE.... JUST TELL ME ALSO.........
              Profile, been buckwild with my style for a while!

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              • #8
                yea playa its st8 for starting???? how long u been puttin down trax????.....um delivery could use a lil more polish but other than that u just need time and practice just like intermediates and pros alike.....pratice makes perfect
                D.U. Productions
                soundclick

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                • #9
                  its the first shit I made man....Im just wondering if I should continue or stop.....Its hard to decide. So that why I wanna know, did it sound like total crap or was it any good at all. ow btw on a dutch hiphop board ppl told me I got a baaaaaad accent. Guess I should rap in my own language?
                  I just need to know.....
                  Last edited by profile; 03-20-2005, 10:43 AM.
                  Profile, been buckwild with my style for a while!

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                  • #10
                    uppin, I know im not good yet....all I wanna know is if theres any future for me rapping if I practise....
                    Profile, been buckwild with my style for a while!

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                    • #11
                      no doubt u should continue just kleep up the work

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                      • #12
                        Practice on upping your vocabulary, You can put lines together But it's too basic for the moment

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                        • #13
                          Yo why won't you rap in Dutch? You've got a little accent. no problem though, not bad for a beginner.
                          100ten%

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                          • #14
                            Thnx for the replys guys! I appreciate it!
                            Profile, been buckwild with my style for a while!

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                            • #15
                              You really have a baaad accent, but I won't say I thing cuz I have it too... :$
                              Yeah it sounds alright for a beginner...well...just keep practicing
                              Ja mischien gewoon in NL's probere...

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