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    Heyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy bitches, i was out of town for a while, but no worry, im bak noww!!!!

    this is a comebak, to the same old enimies
    im bak with more rhymes, ima take u down to ur knees
    cuz look bitches u cant see me
    im too damn fast for ya'll, u gotta see it to believe me
    im racing to the top, dont even try to beat me
    cuz whatever happens *****, u cant defeat me
    and i wont be elated, till this shit is done
    im on fire, dawg, im hotter than the sun
    when i leave this shit, ima leave a dent
    and im too damn harsh, i aint never gon relent
    im an individual, i only go my way
    ima capture u and hurt u and leave u on the high way
    cuz look dawg im bak, so put it in ur mind
    name ir the fear of mine, the man who shines
    with his gold chain, and u cant have it
    yea bitch call me pathetic, cuz now im battleing against a faggot
    ima crush yo lil dick, and smash it
    take out ma 47 and blast it
    and this goes for everyone, be scared of me
    apolagize to me, and have fear of me
    im carrying my guns, trust me they're massive
    and i wasnt taught to be aggressive
    i was just born as one, i cant help it
    ohh yea, i kno im selfish
    and this is it for now, peace the fuck out
    heres some advice: keep yo selves low to the ground

    im bak mutha fucka

  • #2
    So are you dissing me or not?

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    • #3
      You should've stayed dead.

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      • #4
        This freestlye shows very little improvement from other work. You had about 4 lines in there that seemed like you were just trying to take of space. For example:

        i was just born as one, i cant help it
        ohh yea, i kno im selfish

        ^Doesn't need to be in there. Just makes the rap wack.
        Love, live life, proceed, progress

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        • #5
          very good, keep it up...9/10

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          • #6
            Yo dat was aite not bad...nice fow though.....try adding sum multi's...keep writing home's..peace.
            ~AsSaIl~


            Fresh Battle Record -
            KO's - 1
            Wins - 4
            Lost - 1

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            • #7
              yea, try to add some multi's and it'll be much better, but i still like it

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              • #8
                thanks for the feedbak, uppin

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