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    My lips drip with metaphors everytime I spit a rhyme//
    It's as complicated as makin 11 cents out of one dime//
    My lyrics give you a "taste" in ya mouth, depending on the mood//
    My handwriting changes cuz with new rhymes come new "food"//
    My rhymes come in all shapes, sizes and forms, like 2-D//
    The words are "dyslexic," but I make you crave them like you have a "tooth sweet"// (should be sweettooth, but the words are dyslexic)
    The glasses I wear are crooked, my brain follwed their footsteps//
    The words I write "float" across the pages of my booklet//
    My lyrics "flow" so well, you'd think they are at sea "afloat"//
    When I first started rappin, they drowned, but I saved them with a boat// (my good skill is the boat)
    I choke on my rhymes whenever I spit them//
    I throw wackness at them, but my aim is bad, cuz it never hit them//
    My metaphoric style confuses geniuses, and even me//
    I challenged myself to a battle rap, but lost deceivably//
    Every word I ever spoke is visible through the air//
    They flow past he eye can see, bit my telepathic knowledge is fair//
    I connect to my lyrics on a level beyond spoken words//
    My brain comprehends any emotion they, to me, have assured//
    The pages of my notebook bend with every cringe of my lyrics//
    I curve my hand when I write, so my ear touches the page, and I hear them//
    When I write I'm trapped between the barrier of wack and ill//
    I'm niether, cuz my mantality is "You're good if ya lyrics kill"//
    I done "murdered" myself call me a "ghost"-writer//
    Cuz in order to step to my level, you have to become a "close-biter"//
    My blood cells are dyin', my rhymes "illness" have gotten in the air//
    Cuz baby, my rhymes ARE the "Rockets Red Glare!"// (referring to National Anthem)
    Love, live life, proceed, progress

  • #2
    nice flow dogg
    BADNEWZ
    JustRude-Joker Boy-Young Rice

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    • #3
      Thanks...Uppin'
      Love, live life, proceed, progress

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      • #4
        nice shit i was feelin it

        7.5/10

        repay favor....check my spit

        ......Hot Freestyle Please Rate......
        Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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        • #5
          yo, it was good in the beggining, but i started gettin kinda bored, u did have metaphors but i wasn't feelin alot of em, also, if ur trying a new style w/ the metaphors, don't forget about the rest of the shit like flow and multies and what not. i felt that u cuda had more multies, i did however like the lines about the "tooth sweet" that was hot, but that was the only great line in there. the rest were average and very few were below, keep elevtin, just my 2 cents
          "We gotta have fun now, there's only minutes left..."

          R.I.P.

          BIG PROOF

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          • #6
            ^And I appreciated those 2 cents. Uppin'.
            Love, live life, proceed, progress

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            • #7
              Still uppin'...
              Love, live life, proceed, progress

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              • #8
                well all i gots to say is that you winning that beef shit lol bigtoni is fucking embarassing himself with his own corny ass rhymes. i'm out!
                BADNEWZ
                JustRude-Joker Boy-Young Rice

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                • #9
                  Lol. I'm still uppin'.
                  Love, live life, proceed, progress

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                  • #10
                    great shit, and very nice flow

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                    • #11
                      Why thank you. Still uppin'...
                      Love, live life, proceed, progress

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                      • #12
                        now thats my type of shit...liked it alot...
                        9/10
                        My songs can make you cry, take you by surprise
                        And at the same time, make you dry your eyes with the same rhyme

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                        • #13
                          Thanks. Still uppin'
                          Love, live life, proceed, progress

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                          • #14
                            I wish you would have just let the lyrics ride without explaining what some of the lyrics meant. I understand why you did it, but I think you should allow your readers to just figure it out. They'll either get it or they won't. If anyone asks for clarity, then you give it to them. Otherwise, it kinda comes off as you thinking that you're so deep that people couldn't figure your lyrics out on their own. I don't think thats how you meant it, I'm just saying. Cool verse though.

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                            • #15
                              ^Thanks for the feed. Uppin'.
                              Love, live life, proceed, progress

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