First Try And Sh1t

[B-Lazin Balla]

Man, somethings you got on here are right//
If i got such a small dick, why'd she take a big bite?//
Exactly, my thoughts, you jus creatin fake beef//
To ture, any1 can tell you bullshit like tha maple leaf//
Peace keeps they say Canadians are//
Have u pussies chopped up like that monsta saw//
Except, ima do it myslef, cuz im tha real Stone Cold Killa//
Ima give ya girl tha XXX Doctor treatment, special cum filla//
Give her tooth burhs to wash out tha paste//
She loved me so much, I had ta give her a taste//
N this gangsta in his permeditated phaze//
Be like you when u O.D.'ed after a blaze//
Bitch, that's ma nickname, Blaze, get it straight//
Either u on ma safe list, or times cum 2 ur fate//
5 Bullets in tha chest for you//
Homie, next stop is ya girls house, gon fuck ya "boo"//
I'll blow ya dead body up at the funeral//
Show how sick i am in this game of Imunerals//
This shit aint like gang wars, it's face to face//
If you aint man enough, go back to hiding like tha fag mase//
This aint no "Toys R'Us shit//
It's like East an West, i'll cut ya face bitch//
Beef real, jus walk away, n' i'll lay back//
Ma gun handle cocked ready for a pistol smack//
N' 2 ur ugly ass mug posted on tha wall-//
Of fags caled "Hoes Of Biggie Smalls"//
N' when u headin home, you'l be hearin "Certified Gangsta"//
Next thing you know, you'll be dead an known as the "Dead Wanksta"//
Then ima call ya girl, see if she wanna pussy poppin//
Ride ova in my cadillac, give her a nice Icin Toppin//
Ya see, ***** im off tha chain//
My lyrics bring me more shit than u and ur shame//
Im colder than killa, more fiery than pac//
Ima waste ya ass so bad, u aint neva gon talk//
Shit, I shot a few pigs, shanked a few wiggas//
Call in ya wanksta crews AKA *****s//
Nah, i ain INjustified//
Im Justified//
Im Blaze, Im Permifried//
E-u got tha shit, gon put us in tha phaze//
Call is Easy-Blaze, cuz we tha main craze//

Got more, since I started writing a little while back!
Rate and give commments to how i can make this shit better. Thanks

[#1KILLA]

for your first try that was pretty good... take the first bar for example..

"Man, somethings you got on here are right//
If i got such a small dick, why'd she take a big bite?//"

thats a fairly ok punch...

flow was on point..
multies, not spectacular but, try to make them slightly more complicated and with a pun..

overall i'd say that was a good effort.. keep it up

[B-Lazin Balla]

Aight..Thanks. I wrote some more...Please Please Rate. And im really having trouble with these multies..It just doesn't flow the wat i wanted it to so i changed it up..

Bitch im unbeatable, untouchable, an un-rapped//
Im like a ghost, cuz i can't be capped//
Ya'll white boys gettin all up in our faces//
Shut em up, they truned white like Carmellos Laces//
Pure white, pure pale, pure pussy//
Jus like ya ma's pussy, cept u more wussy//
N u tryin ta rap like we 50 & G-Unit//
Dun make me b like E an jus loose it//
Now compare yourself, me against you//
U couldn't rap even wid da book "Raps 4 Dummies X2// ( HeHe, kinda funny)
Cuz bitch, i'll put in a hole in you//
Put ya mo pain than 50 went thorugh//
Not with guns or gats, but with lyrical knives//
I'll stab ya once, n scratch away 1 of ya 9 lives//
Pussy ass bitch, what you gonna do now?//
Ur silenced, n the whole crowds liek "wow"//
This brown mufucka actually capped a masta//
A masta's who's lyrical is much much fasta//
Got u frontin, 2 stuntin, on a lryical flow//
Got u humpin, still bumpin, on the fukin prostitute road// (Damn Man-Whores LOL)
N ur rhymes may, be, out of control//
But mine so bad, im on lyrical parole// (Uh-oh :P)

[B-Lazin Balla]

Upin...Please Rate n give feedback on how to make this better..
Appreciate it...

[Frozen North]

First and last? Alas my dreams are shattered by a second post.

[justrude88]

Fuck Yo Hatin Ass^

[Frozen North]

Tissue for the cry baby?

[justrude88]

i'm just tired of yo bitch ass hatin of everybody. you got all dat fuckin mouth and prolly can't even fight or nothin. u prolly some spoiled as kid that ain't got shit to do but harrass motherfuckers on the net.I think you need to get a real life b4 some1 takes the pointless one that you have

[Frozen North]

Take a look in the mirror son. You're crying over the internet because someone is picking on you. Suck it up and take it like a man.

[justrude88]

ya right. I'm fucking laughing at yo ass. You talk shit like you the motherfucking king. shit keep dreaming n!gga

[B-Lazin Balla]

I asked for feed, not some fucking gimp arguing bullshit...