My Freestyle

[MCErase]

THis is my freestyle for everyone to hear
so sit back and smoke a bowl and then grab a beer
cuz this is some lyrically mastery before your eyes
and dont think im gonna step up and try to battle one of those experienced guys
this is my freestyle so everyone can laugh
at a young white boy from the midwest for trying to be an MC
my name is erase cuz i like nothing negative
erase the world of all the negative issues, wouldnt that be tight
we need some positive vibrations within the rap game, cuz peace is alright
so everyone who packs the heat should listen up
dont be so aggressive with your words you all think your G'd up
but you ain't nothin but illiterate fools who think that you can get anything you want with your gat in your lap
thats not reality homie, thats all on MTV and not on the street
peace is the answer to the worlds problems
so yall better exchange your guns for some killa kali weed buds

[Drunk Monkey]

Didn't really rhyme, and your flow was off.

This piece ain't gonna be taken seriously as a rap, but I thought the stream of consciousness you were expressing was interestin.

Peace

[MCErase]

ok thanks for the constructive criticism

[Just B. Kuz]

yeah, I like yo verse too, you got your own style
you aint gotta try to be like 8 mile
do your own thang always be original
people on this web site can be overly critical
but fuck all that, this is bout freestyle rhymin
whoever's tryin to be Paula Abdul or Simon
can eat a dick sandwich with no mayo or mustard
lay low or trust this, I'm a k.o you busters
keep Erasing fools with the back of yo pencil
or stab em with the lead part if thats what ya into
I love rhymin and all of hip hop in general
so tell all them haters to stay off the genitals

One love - keep doin yo thizzle

[7Lady_Ice7]

its iight but give it a lil touch up here n there