Rap i just mad up, its short (check it out)

[LPShady825]

Ill skillz, techniques and gold grills,
leave thrills and demented images that kills,
the fake artist with no clue at his portrayal and will fullfil,
the dreams of a talented artist tryin to make them bills,
whose then put in the game that's most definately the harshest,
one shot it all could end,
cuz this games the hardest,
step up or ur gone, its like steppin into a war,
next second ur lost so who u playin for?

just felt like writin somethin. id like to hear some feedback. thanks!!

[Lil'Doped]

just remembered i said i'd leave some feedback for you rhyme, well im liking it, the vocabulary's good and the contents deep, you might be new here but id say keep writing cause you got some skills

[F2theN]

10billion/10. You are the next Big Daddy Kane.

[1shadymf]

Thats Tight Guy ..... Good Shit..man..

[Just B. Kuz]

How anyone could be on a hip hop site and claim to be representing hip hop, but using another's atist's name, even as a screen name, is beyond me. Its called biting, the cardinal sin of hip hop. Thats for anyone using someone else's name. You are all wack to me. Stop jocking. You wanna be Eminem, Canibus, Royce, 8 mile, etc.

[X2ThaC]

----^ and heres the spectator of judging screen names.... anyways.. nice spit keep up the work homez, u got some talent

[*Roxanne]

tight ..
Keep doing your thang mayne
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