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  • Hostage Crisis

    Detonation set behind enemy lines
    mother n child captured evidentally cryin
    troops rushin in flauntin armed possessions
    misuse of thrustin sin snipers alarmed at sections
    subjects held at ransom for collateral
    law officials mentally tampered by tha battle view
    awaitin terms of legal tender to settle negotiations
    motivated not to surrender in this life or death situation
    atmosphere the attempts concealed in provin masquerade
    no fear of death to inspect by the hostage's now life aids
    all terrorists masked certain their identity's disguised
    no relevance in-fact desertin the examplary's* lives [innocent]
    the general enraged by era requestin further addition
    for decimals enslaved in terror the youth gets held in submission
    relatives watchin the broadkast noticin the subject's strapped
    wit projectile attack devices capable of takin out tha habitat
    fed entering wit a brief case considerin the precise amount
    held at gun-point rather than to arrest while a soldier concised the count
    troops headin to get a way unpleasant at tha statistics
    set-off the mother's projections causin destructable resistance
    no survivors only diceased now located in the building's premise
    deprived-of their life to lead forsaken amongst the resemblance

  • #2
    the concept was good and also the flow..but PLEASE dont put advanced vocab throughout your WHOLE VERSE. simple it down some but still send a message. you can put vocab in some parts..but not all.if you do u sound like all the rest of the netceez..and 2 much vocab makes the verse more boring cause the people dont know wat most the word means..but besides the vocab problem this verse is good
    First rapping was my ambition for me so I can get richs/
    I flowed so much it turned into a lyrical addiction/

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    • #3
      Yeah man dats understandable
      should put up one of your demonstrations on a thread help me get a fairer view on sharpening sum skills
      peace

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      • #4
        iam not perfect...iam just saying...that 2 much vocab can make a normal hip hop fan fall asleep you know
        First rapping was my ambition for me so I can get richs/
        I flowed so much it turned into a lyrical addiction/

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