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    Well I've been takin' shit cuz my vokab sux (which is true)
    So I attempted to work on it...just let me no what you think...thnks...rep for good feed...

    The clocks tickin', and my bodies twitchin'//
    Times almost out and I'm runnin' empty on diction//
    My witts sucked dry, totally deflated//
    My brainz empty, all thoughts ejaculated//
    Starin' at a blank page, only hollow thoughtz//
    Caught in a cage, I'm totally distraught//
    But I can't complain, sit here and grumble//
    Step up in this ring, I'm ready to rumble//
    Interpret my words to your own meaning//
    They have you uncomfortable, like you in a G~string//
    And the more you wiggle the more it tightin's//
    You mortals can't beat me Cuz I'm a TITAN//
    The light starts to flicker back on in my dome//
    Thoughts conjurin' quicker, no longer leavin' to rome//
    Spit quick licks at your shit with efficincy//
    You wishin' G, that maybe I'll be missin' with these//
    Last edited by Axis; 08-20-2005, 11:46 AM.
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    yo man i lik this piece alot n uve elevated alot on this n this is a seroius suggestion,read the dictionary dawg or scan thru it n jus take out words from each page n work around them,thats jus my 2 cents but i lik this piece,keep at it dawg

    peace
    You ain't got a truck that's hooked up with rims
    Kids'll see you like "damn, why I looked up to him?

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    • #3
      Thnks...yeah I started skimmin' it when I get bored...or on car rides...thnks for the feed and advice...*you think thatz good enought for your crew lol*
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      • #4
        lo u really want in,well we'll keep u as an option n jus see if theres anymore tryouts but it is very gd n ill tlk it over wit the other memebers

        peace
        You ain't got a truck that's hooked up with rims
        Kids'll see you like "damn, why I looked up to him?

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        • #5
          Aight thnks..yeah I'd like in if possible...I'm keepin' up with my new style of writtin' here...
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          • #6
            read the dictionairy and take advantage of metaphors and wordplay .. im going 2 bed.. night
            Originally posted by Realize
            evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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            • #7
              good , you elevated , and about crew we will keep you as option but only if you keep writting with your new style

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              • #8
                ...yeah i like ur new style...simply cuz am usin tha style since i started to rap and decided to keep it evendough other were thinkin it was whack lol..
                but its real good.. by tha way u might liked my post go read it..its called..Freestyle ILLshit!
                i do need to step up my vocab too i think and multies a lil bitt!
                but i got nie ideas i think
                KEEP FUCKIN ARROUND!

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                • #9
                  uppin'
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                  • #10
                    just read a book and practice freestylin by playin off of any thing you see it helps

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                    • #11
                      Originally posted by AC3
                      good , you elevated , and about crew we will keep you as option but only if you keep writting with your new style
                      da fuck homie? grandhustle?
                      Originally posted by Realize
                      evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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                      • #12
                        yo man wat u mean grandhustle,hes in r crew n hes a brilliant write n my dawg n check out r new song calld loosin control,its hot

                        peace
                        You ain't got a truck that's hooked up with rims
                        Kids'll see you like "damn, why I looked up to him?

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                        • #13
                          o, well i havent read anything from him recently, last time i checked he was hated by a couple people and hella annoying.. but yea i'll peep it
                          Originally posted by Realize
                          evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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                          • #14
                            yo peep it n ull c,even no hes new hes becumin one of the best

                            peace
                            You ain't got a truck that's hooked up with rims
                            Kids'll see you like "damn, why I looked up to him?

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