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    I had never seen anything so exquisit//
    I mean my eyez rolled back just to re-visit//
    And I was immideatily addicted//
    If starin' was a crime I'd be convicted//
    I was just utterly dazed and confused//
    You wouldn't know unless you in my shoez//
    It was like an angel came from above//
    Pushed and shoved threw the crowd till I was near enough to touch//
    Reached out and grabbed myself a slip...//
    And read it, mouth hung open drool startin' to drip//
    Thought to myself this way to good to be true//
    Sweat condensin' on my face just like dew//
    Could this be, this girl next to me with the double D's//
    Out on this street handin' her number out for Free//

    LOL w/e...tried to make a twist....
    Last edited by Axis; 08-19-2005, 03:11 PM.
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  • #2
    good , vocab could be a little bit better , and you need to use multis and inners to break down monotony , but it was good
    will you repay favour and check my song EMOTIONS ERUPTION

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    • #3
      uppin'
      Download my new mixtape "Public Axis Vol. 1" http://www.sendspace.com/file/7527jn
      New Beats: www.soundclick.com/axisproductions
      Mixing/Mastering available! PM for details.

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      • #4
        yo dawg i liked the flow n topic but jus up on vocab n multis but keep at it caus u r a gd writer

        peace
        You ain't got a truck that's hooked up with rims
        Kids'll see you like "damn, why I looked up to him?

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        • #5
          Yeah I'ma start writtin' whole songs now cuz I finished producin' some of my own shit..now I just gotta add words lol...thnks for feed...
          And about the multies and vocab...i try but most of these are keystyles so i don't want to just sit and think...when I sit and think most of the time there pretty good (i think lol) thnks again...
          Download my new mixtape "Public Axis Vol. 1" http://www.sendspace.com/file/7527jn
          New Beats: www.soundclick.com/axisproductions
          Mixing/Mastering available! PM for details.

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