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  • Crouched on the Staircase (personal shit please peep)

    Yo , this was one of the first real verses i wrote. (when i was bout 16) its bout my experience of domestic violence, ya know, my dad beating on my moms. its called crouched on the staircase cuz thats where my sistas and me used to sit when they were arguing. i appreciate critique but it is personal shit so dont be too harsh aiight.


    I feel indescribable pain,
    Confusion-Illusions appearing again,
    My small frame,sits inane.
    Not knowing,
    Just what is going on?
    I see him rain blows-blood flowing,
    Her nose is busted open.
    I try to remain hoping,
    “He’s only joking,he don’t mean the words he’s spoken”,
    “Moms heart aint really broken”
    They’ll work it out-no doubt,
    ‘Cuz love conquers all,
    Feel vibrations through the wall,as he punches her once more.
    I wish I wasn't so small,
    I wanna rescue her,take her away from it all,
    So he can’t hurt her no more.
    My tears fall to the floor,
    I see my sisters crying,
    Trying to believe the lying,
    But they know the love is dying.
    Painful screams break the silence,
    How can true love create such violence?
    Inside us,we all feel pain-Why do we force it on others?
    Especially those that love us,our sisters and our brothers.
    Something's may give us comfort,
    But they can’t stop the conflict,
    We feel within our conscience,
    It’s real and always constant.
    I wonder now-how those events shaped my fate?
    The origin of all my hate,
    Made crouched on the staircase,Up late


    thanx for reading

    PEACE

    Illrun (or "lil-pac" as my rap name was in those days haha)
    The only thing worse than the wretched pain in my mouth is the excrement spewing from yours-Stewie Griffen

    ONLY GOD CAN JUDGE ME

    R.I.P ~ Tupac Shakur-my biggest musical inspiration…you are missed everyday

  • #2
    That's tight dawg. I really liked it. Hope everything's better for you now. Keep it up. Peace.
    Peace 5 and 92, you're missed.

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    • #3
      Yo im cool now brother, you know life goes on
      He left, i grew up, i dont think id recognize the bitch if he walked up and slapped me in the face. Its all good without him

      Appreciate the reply man. keep peeping

      PEACE
      The only thing worse than the wretched pain in my mouth is the excrement spewing from yours-Stewie Griffen

      ONLY GOD CAN JUDGE ME

      R.I.P ~ Tupac Shakur-my biggest musical inspiration…you are missed everyday

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      • #4
        whoa

        i thought that shit was ill... you put mad details in it, and i was really feelin that.

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        • #5
          Yeah I hear ya man, my parents divorced when I was a baby so I didn't really grow up with him. He always lived close by and we kept in touch. But I haven't talked to him in the last 9 months, so I say fuck him. He gave up 3 kids to be with his slut wife. I don't need that mutherfucker so I fell ya dawg. Peace.
          Peace 5 and 92, you're missed.

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          • #6
            hey, i really felt that, i like it a lot. Gave me a real insight into what it musta been like for u cause ive never had to go through it all myself. I like the way its not all some beef at the man too, its got about what u kids think n shit, about how u think they'll get over it. To be honist with ya though, i dont think its as good as a rap because it would be real slow n shit, spose it would work but just not my kinda thing. That had some real good rhythm to it though, i liked that part. Good to hear your getting on with your life, n post more shit so i can read it

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            • #7
              real shit. got me kinda thinkin, if thats wut my mom went through.
              cause when my parents split up i was only 4, and i neva seen my father since but he wants me to visit him but. i don know wut im gonna say to him.

              n e ways. straight up. real shit.
              [email protected]
              The Proof is in the puddin', Just ask Deshawn Holton.

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              • #8
                Yo thanx for all da feedback fellaz. if theres one thing i love bout hip hop its that all the artists are real. everyone feels pain and whereas other musics kinda shy away from this kinda subject, hip hop embraces it. we all outta control right? but as long as hip hop stays as a community and doesnt get to caught up in the mad fame its getting now, i know that hip hop will always get me through those kinda times. all da violence shit happened when i was like 10. i saw the faggat a few times after but he werent the same person to me anymore. it must be 4-1/2 years since i last saw him, but i aint mad it couldve been worse right? - the bastad couldve stayed!! (haha)

                Like i said thanx for the feedback y'all


                PEACE
                The only thing worse than the wretched pain in my mouth is the excrement spewing from yours-Stewie Griffen

                ONLY GOD CAN JUDGE ME

                R.I.P ~ Tupac Shakur-my biggest musical inspiration…you are missed everyday

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                • #9
                  Yo man that shit was ill and real deep. That aint an easy thing to go thru and I think that it is tight that you shared that with all of us here.
                  Guess who's back...

                  All tight emcee's Keep Ya Head Up, Play in the Game cuz the Game don't wait

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                  • #10
                    real deep

                    yo ur rhymez hit strait to the heart. they were real as fuck, i even got some imagines in my head. something i hope i never go thru and hope that no one has to go thru. i'm sorry dogg, but things are betta now, way to vent yo emotions man. rappin is therapy if you know how to work it da right way. keep it real dogg. gshit
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                    "He Who Makes a Beast Out of Himself, Gets Rid of the Pain of Being a Man."
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