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    Verse 1....of 3 or 4 (4 cuz sumtimez my verses aren't very long)


    I'm blowin' up so fast....ya'll better watch me//
    Now when you here Axis you won't be thinkin' Nazi//
    No amount of glocks or cops can stop me//
    Sooner or later ya'll be hatin' on me cuz ya not me//
    After all my waitin' and patience I finally made it//
    Ambitions are strong, my raps will never be faded//
    My condition of egotism has landed my atop the game//
    As I position my wisdom to control this world with my fame//
    I'm temptin' all skatin' over thin ice//
    When I die I'm comin' back so I can win twice//
    I'm hustlin' life into the streetz so kids can feel nice//
    To get rid of there pain, so they no what pleasure feels like//
    Won't sub-side my drive to they industry fakes//
    Fuck one step at a time, one leap's all it takes//

    Just verse 1 got some more to come lol...tried to work some vocab in there...holla at me...you'll get some rep
    Download my new mixtape "Public Axis Vol. 1" http://www.sendspace.com/file/7527jn
    New Beats: www.soundclick.com/axisproductions
    Mixing/Mastering available! PM for details.

  • #2
    If you gunna read it....feed plz...thnks...
    All it takes is ''nice drop'' or ''shit needs work'' if you wnat to be more therough that'd be great too...
    Rep for feed...
    Download my new mixtape "Public Axis Vol. 1" http://www.sendspace.com/file/7527jn
    New Beats: www.soundclick.com/axisproductions
    Mixing/Mastering available! PM for details.

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    • #3
      *bump*...this place getz less and less active everyday....cept' for a lone few...
      Download my new mixtape "Public Axis Vol. 1" http://www.sendspace.com/file/7527jn
      New Beats: www.soundclick.com/axisproductions
      Mixing/Mastering available! PM for details.

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      • #4
        goo shit.. i like it

        nice flow good rhyme...nice vocab
        so good shit
        KEEP FUCKIN ARROUND!

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        • #5
          i liked it, goos use of vocab, EZ flow 2 wwork with, good multies on certain lines, try n up on creativity n wordplay hott drop man keep it up

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          • #6
            good verse, the best is the flow. keep at it man

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            • #7
              yo man its ok,in my opinion its one of ur weaker pieces caus u can produce sum hot shit but netherless this was still a very gd piece,u still jus needa up on ur vocab

              peace
              You ain't got a truck that's hooked up with rims
              Kids'll see you like "damn, why I looked up to him?

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              • #8
                oh yeah i posted up on this thread before commented a line n mentioned fuck tha law [no glockkz or copz can stop me]
                jus wnted to reply since i deleted my previous thread on dis
                sorry if u consider this floodin - no offense if you wanna respond back wit somethin a bitch would - dont take it to heart - since ur a vet
                Last edited by grandhustle19; 08-21-2005, 08:44 PM.

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                • #9
                  it was good verse but Im not really feelin the topic but it was still good.

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                  • #10
                    It's a little simple, but I like it overall. The lyrics are on point for the most part. Maybe step up with the multis if you want to. Maybe make the lyrics a little more touching throughout the whole verse as well.

                    Peace.
                    Last edited by pandemic; 08-21-2005, 11:29 PM.
                    P!

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