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  • $$$--hot Freestyle--$$$--check It

    Enjoy readin this, peace

    When ya fall to ya knee's, get back-to-ya-feet/
    continue throwin raps-at-these-weaks, continue bustin caps-at-these-geek's/
    my lyrics come strapped-wit-these-beats, i rip MIC's-ta-shreds/
    for them Nike's, i'll fill guys-wit-lead and leave dyke's-for-dead/
    im battlin cats on streets, and SERVIN dude's over tha NET like-a-TENNIS-BALL/
    i grip tha MIC-n-menace-ya'll, swung a machette at ya fingers but only severed-four/
    have ya tuxedo suits-ready, im rollin down ya block like 200 troops-heavy/
    wit 2 Nukes-steady.....n ready ta wreck-a-guys-hood/
    and put my foot thru ya chest like a deck-'a'-ply-wood, till ya spirits headin skyward/
    ah yeah, DJ bust-a-beat n watch me crush-tha-weak wit some heinz-mustard-heat/
    find bullets from my nine-encrusted-deep....in ya chest-n-ya-bone-piece's/
    leave ya's restin-alone-speachless, wit blood on my white toned-sneakers/
    shit, a dude wit long arms couldnt reach-this....line-'a'-skill/
    ya spine'll-chill when ya check tha ryhme's-i-spill, im tryna overdose, Fuck, im onto my final-pill/
    my heads-spinnin, havin visions of Richard Ramirez grinnin' beside a grave of dead-women/
    wit blood sprayed on ya bed-linen, im trippin, seein 'toons-on-speed, Fuck i need room-ta-breathe, to many shrooms-n-weed..
    Banned - RapBasement Staff

  • #2
    i thiought shis was koo, i liked sum of the metophores put you didnt approach sum of them correcty.

    "....in ya chest-n-ya-bone-piece's/
    leave ya's restin-alone-speachless, wit blood on my white toned-sneakers/"
    ^^^^this was ill it had good wordplay and flow.
    they say he comes like a thief in the night
    sum say, you see fire when he breathe on the mic!
    the legend has it his neck and his back is tatted
    and his arms are scriptures of Psalms!

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    • #3
      thanks for tha positive feed back man, i appreciate it
      Banned - RapBasement Staff

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      • #4
        dont sleep on this shit, feed back needed
        Banned - RapBasement Staff

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        • #5
          umm 8\10 keep it up make everything shorter and go together
          -=|578|=-

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          • #6
            thanks bruz, i guess i gotta shorten my bars
            Banned - RapBasement Staff

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            • #7
              it was good 7.5/10 n yea your bars need to be shorter n vocab can always be improved for anyone, but it was still good...good multis

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              • #8
                cheers bruz
                Banned - RapBasement Staff

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                • #9
                  uppin on feedback
                  Banned - RapBasement Staff

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