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    some people don't think that I have what it takes in this rap game
    but unlike the fake rappers I don't take breaks on this road to fame
    I perfect my skills every day of the week, all I need is a beat
    then I can lay down my lyrical suite, and no I don't pack heat
    so what more can I say, I'm more than a wanna be
    homies think they can play with me I'm like a mystery
    doin' that is a mistake, they don't know what they're in for
    I'm like icing on a cake, I'm sweet when I bust in the door
    the midwest is where I grew up, where I perfected my skill
    so just give me a damn cup, with rum and coke and some pills
    nah I'm just playin' I don't pop, but I will fill my cup to the top
    and no ones gonna make me stop rappin' not even the cops
    so don't even try to test it, I really don't give a shit
    so go ahead and put a slit in your wrist and listen to me spit
    this complex lyrical masterpiece, that I am about to create
    I am trying to say the least, to lay down my skills and mediate
    the situation on the streets with all of the gangs and murders
    so everyone take your seats and listen to the greatest mc ever heard of
    Last edited by MCErase; 08-26-2005, 09:53 AM.
    MC ERASE ------------------------------------- MC ERASE
    www.myspace.com/mcerase
    MC ERASE ------------------------------------- MC ERASE

  • #2
    thats was real good , you should put in some multis though, some lines were too long which broke the flow a bit, but nice spit over all man.
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    • #3
      I thought I did put in multis...what exactly is a multi?
      MC ERASE ------------------------------------- MC ERASE
      www.myspace.com/mcerase
      MC ERASE ------------------------------------- MC ERASE

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      • #4
        This Was A Nice Read... But Yuh, U Do Need Multis To Help Ur Flow Better..

        A Multi Example Would Be:

        Take A Stand
        Hate A Man
        Make A Grand
        etc..
        (2-2) Kansas City Chiefs (2-2)
        Last Game: 10/2/05 @ Philadelphia Eagles (3-1) .. L 31-37
        Next Game: 10/09/05 Bye Week (0-0) .. 00-00

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        • #5
          Good.. keep up the work..
          <--------- I got a Shady_Gangsta original.. yeah!

          (somebulls -=CCDF=- (somebulls

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          • #6
            ok, but I did put multi's in the whole thing...
            for example:
            the midwest is where I grew up, where I perfected my skill
            so just give me a damn cup, with rum and coke and some pills
            MC ERASE ------------------------------------- MC ERASE
            www.myspace.com/mcerase
            MC ERASE ------------------------------------- MC ERASE

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            • #7
              Originally posted by MCErase
              ok, but I did put multi's in the whole thing...
              for example:
              the midwest is where I grew up, where I perfected my skill
              so just give me a damn cup, with rum and coke and some pills
              That Isnt A Multi...

              PERFECTED My SKILL
              COKE And SOME PILLS


              Nah^^... They Have To Have 2 Or More Words With Rhyming From Each.. Same Number Of Syylable Like My Example

              TAKE A STAND
              HATE A MAN
              MAKE A GRAND
              (2-2) Kansas City Chiefs (2-2)
              Last Game: 10/2/05 @ Philadelphia Eagles (3-1) .. L 31-37
              Next Game: 10/09/05 Bye Week (0-0) .. 00-00

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              • #8
                I'm feelin' it. It looks like something would write for the most part.

                I personally would like it better if you'd step up with the multis and don't ever claim to be the greatest emcee ever again. It's okay to be cocky, but not that much. I don't think it would be easier to elevate if you think that way.

                I think you should step up with the flow too.

                Multis = multisyllable rhymes

                They can be multiple words rhyming with others like:

                I'm fuckin' crazy-tonight, and you're too lazy-to-fight
                You still can't phase-me-or-fright. You can just praise-me-, alright?

                ^Yeah, I know that lyrically sucked, but those rhymes are multis. That also brings to my attention that you shouldn't say shit just to rhyme.

                Multis can also be one multisyllable word rhyming with another like:

                I'm a very rich man and get high-paid salaries
                from paintin' pictures.I paint shit loads of gallaries.

                ^Yeah I know this one sucked lyrically too. Again, don't say shit just to rhymes words.

                Peace.
                P!

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                • #9
                  Rhymes can be many words or just long words that have rhyming syllables

                  My Example:

                  Leave you shakin like crack addict
                  Feeling invicinble in my Flak jacket
                  You fucked up with a Wack tactic
                  God damnit who let Zac back at it

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                  • #10
                    Ok, I thought multis were just two rhymes in a line, but they are multisyllable rhymes, thanks for the info.
                    MC ERASE ------------------------------------- MC ERASE
                    www.myspace.com/mcerase
                    MC ERASE ------------------------------------- MC ERASE

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                    • #11
                      Not bad, To be honest I didn't read the whole thing. Topic is a bit played but most topics these days are. Itz hard to totally find an original topic.
                      Every other piece of advice has already been givin' to you, so just work on gettin' more creative.

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                      • #12
                        more creative , more complex and add multis

                        but you will elevate

                        plz vote in my battle AC3 vs. Rodamon

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                        • #13
                          Originally posted by MCErase
                          Ok, I thought multis were just two rhymes in a line, but they are multisyllable rhymes, thanks for the info.
                          Those are called internal rhymes and they can be more than two rhymes like:

                          I'm the best in the west that no fuckin' pest can test
                          Put on a vest on your chest or you'll be put to rest
                          P!

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