D.E.T. Rep, for feed

[SlimShady02]

Work in progress.....verse 1 of 4

[hook]
Even police won't stop at red~lights
You don't want to be caught alone at dead~nite
No punches, only lead~fights
People seem to think bloodsheds~all~rite

It used to be the only thing I had known
Detroit city my sanktion, my home
A place where cops don't police~streets
And the streets always defeat~the~weak
The only jobs to do are hustlin' and left
Couldn't wait until the day I left
But for the years I was embeded in its poverty
I vowed it would never devour me
Murder still prevelent like its mandatory
Wishin' we still the Mo-Town glory
No wonder itz still called Amityville
Cut It'll drive you to insantiy still

Lookin' for feed, and yes I know itz short for a verse, I'm workin' on 2 more bars

[jadaafa]

yo man nice shit,jus start workin on mutlis n vocab caus ur flow seemd gd,jus keep at it n keep elevatin

could u check out ym shit man calld the lights gone or armageddon

peace

[SlimShady02]

Bump

[Axis]

uppin' for me

[dead|ine]

tight verse.. looking good so far. Would be heaps good with a better vocab.

"The only jobs to do are hustlin' and left,
Couldn't wait until the day I left."

^left and left or was the first line meant to be "theft" either way, interesting :]