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  • Verbal Outreach vs. Section 8

    r00k didnt sent me his verse and didnt seen him active last few days so that this dont last too long we are going without him

    TOPIC – Last Day

    Rules
    Ho hate or d/r votes
    Votes don’t have to be in cats but if you have time put a few cats
    3-0 KO, 4-1 TKO or first to 5 votes
    If we don’t have a winner after 48 hours, crew with more votes is winner

    Members of winning crew can put a victory in their topical battle record

    and plz say which verse you liked best


    VERBAL OUTREACH

    (grandhustle19)
    Last day on earth time to embrace final moments
    no gain to deserve ratha hate vital disownment
    outreach so many sectionz in this final complexion
    breach so many neglections like homicidal affection
    to my rivalz best crossed time to ride on em
    deny their survival concept before holocaust collides on em
    ask lord for forgiveness whilst appraisin all the carin
    this force n it's diligence reincarnatin the darin
    preservin submergence of this definite x factor
    unheard of resurgence of the decisive extractor


    CHORUS
    God is grabbing our fates, he is closing his gate
    we arent welcome , he clearly states I guess we are too late
    so lets stay along earth in this last day, from birth till decease
    No mather how hard it hurts , now battle stations , RED ALERT (goodbye)


    (Jadaafa)
    i wish-god would deem-me-excempt-frm-hell,
    caus truths-hard,prision seems-2-extend-beyond-jail,
    n when r last day beckons on earth,
    il ask-for-forgivness caus ive been neglectd since birth,
    n as-my-witness he knows ive tried my best,
    n wit my las dyin breath my sins-ill-confess,
    n win-lifes-tests n spend it wit my baby-gurl,
    caus shes perfection-in-the-physical in this shady-world,
    n since my conception-its-been-miserable bt she eases-the-pain
    n my thesis-the-same,life wnt stop until it ceases-in-my-brain


    CHORUS
    God is grabbing our fates, he is closing his gate
    we arent welcome , he clearly states I guess we are too late
    so lets stay along earth in this last day, from birth till decease
    No mather how hard it hurts , now battle stations , RED ALERT (goodbye)


    (AC3)
    People brains disintegrating while fuckin sky is absolutely~dividing
    God fuckin meditating under our hollow psyches and scarcely~finding
    Psyches that generally~emanate benevolence and can fully~corporate
    Really~associate in association that despise those like me,truly~inappropriate
    Cuz I wasnt deprecating, supplicating God in every trouble I was participating
    I can say this thing “I worked for all I have”, not God that is now hating
    My really hardly acquired achievements, my poignant advancement
    And now “His Almighty~Excellence” is trying to sinisterly~repress
    This arduous world and close gates to heaven to end my life story
    But hey don’t worry I will have open gates to Satan’s purgatory (haha)




    SECTION 8


    [rodoman]
    If I knew that world would fucking finish today
    Of course I would responded of the words that you said
    ‘Goodbye’ goodbye mother, i love you yes this shit is ending
    Damn, sorry you wont see from me no kids, no wedding
    Im a yell til my vocal cords cant stand no more pain
    Then Ima beat everybody I see cuz this life is a short thang
    My brain aint connected, I can do what my nuts want to
    But Im too scared so I just be paralized, I cant run dude
    I see everybody despairin screamin all his truth crimes
    I wont sucide, still aint my time, but do it, maybe is your time


    [insushin]
    theres a purple haze in this maze i walk through, ive been lost for days in a cloak of solitude
    at the sky i gaze apocolyptic rays of an intergalactic climactic feud/
    i had nobody and now theres nobody to have, i got a feeling an its really bad
    at birth, i lost all i had, on this earth, so for this end im sorta glad/
    it all happened in a second, a flash a bang and everyone was frettin
    i felt threatened and at the same time i felt beckoned/
    to do something to stop this madness but i was overwhelmed by sadness
    my body flushed with a rush of blood givin me power just enough to dodge decsendin rocks hittin the rough/
    im gonna use my time, starin at the last sun-shine, ill ever see, this great divine is the end of you and me
    ill never give up im fightin blind like a mantis outnumbered times three, this moments one of a kind it wont be on tv, this is the end, the end of earths history/


    [hook]
    if its the last day
    if we gon to pass away
    what we should do...
    lets take a nine, aim at our head and shoot to?
    its too late now
    the end is today, now
    lets scream and dispair
    complainin to nobody that this world was unfair...(but it wasnt)


    [dawny]
    its the last day, the last pay//
    no life, no wife, no1 2 fuckin stab wit a knife//
    no more earth who will give birth//
    its so fucked up, jus like cocine addicts yup//
    its fianally come to an end, no1 left 2 ofend//
    no way ne1 can mend, this situation//
    so we are giving you an invation//
    to grab your guns and fight, 'oh shit' who turned off the light//
    the time is right, its now a world war//
    everby body get to the floor, this is section 8 at your door//


    [witho]
    This is the last time I get out of bed //
    the last day I get dressed //
    the first day I aint gunner rest //
    first day my heart has been put to the test //
    today Ima rhyme my best //
    and put a 9 in ya chest
    ima go all out do things ive never done//
    but i dont think theres time i dont wanna go, im too young//
    I may as well aint gonna get locked up //
    I may as well go and lick ya mum's knockers//


    [hook]
    if its the last day
    if we gon to pass away
    what we should do...
    lets take a nine, aim at our head and shoot to?
    its too late now
    the end is today, now
    lets scream and dispair
    complainin to nobody that this world was unfair...but it wasnt
    last day, for all my brothers, last day, for all the mothers, the last day, for all the others
    the last day, heads down and pray, lets all get away, spiritually, blissfully, residually, figuratively, seemingly in everyway together we be,

  • #2
    Verbal Outreach

    Hustle
    Flowed well. Vocab was nice

    Jaadafa
    Great multis. Flow was off tha chain.

    Ace
    Nice work. Some great rhymes in there.

    Section 8

    Rodamon
    Wasnt really feelin ya verse. Flow was nice but u need to up your complexity to make it interesting.

    Insushin
    Nice lyrics. Vocab was nice

    Dawny
    Bit too simple but there is room to elevate

    Witho
    same as above. Need to elevate

    Overall Verbal Outreach took this. Better rhymes in all aspects.

    (Jaadafa verse was best in my point of veiw)
    _____________________________

    They call me Sinful for a reason.....
    Think about it.....

    _____________________________

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    • #3
      thanks for breaking it down , really appreciate

      1-0 Verbal outreach

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      • #4
        yo man thanks for the vote
        You ain't got a truck that's hooked up with rims
        Kids'll see you like "damn, why I looked up to him?

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        • #5
          uppin for votes............
          You ain't got a truck that's hooked up with rims
          Kids'll see you like "damn, why I looked up to him?

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          • #6
            (I included pros and cons for each verse, I wanted to vote earlier but the website was having troubles)

            Verbal Outreach

            GrandHustle: nice vocab and flow, coherence was comprimised by your word choices
            Jadaafa: emotional and compelling to read, your vocab could be improved
            AC3: good vocab and execution, the flow was rough in some parts

            Section 8

            Rodamon: I can feel the desperation, and you had good emotion, the flow was rough in some parts
            Insushin: flow and multis were great, your bar stucture could use some work (some were short, some were long)
            Dawny: the flow was good, try to use more complex ideas in your verses
            Witho: liked the end, good humor, try to use more complex ideas in your verses

            My overall vote would have to be for Verbal Outreach, but my favorite verse was Insushin's. Good battle everybody, win or lose.
            Free Agent
            3 Wins - 3 KOs - 2 Losses

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            0 Wins - 0 KOs - 0 Losses

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            • #7
              Thanks to Vocab n SinFul for the votes n constructive feed
              2-0 Verbal Outreach

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              • #8
                Uppin

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                • #9
                  oh whos battlin?? haha

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                  • #10
                    Verbal Outreach:
                    AC3 : Nice vocab and the use of the word "Purgatory" also got nice flow and originality.
                    Jadaafa : Good flow, mayby vocab could be a bit better, but the emotion was deep.
                    GrandHustle19 : Nice flow, nice vocab and nice word choices.

                    Section 8:
                    Radamon : in a few bits, the flow went wrong, but it had a lot of fealin.
                    Insushin : Loved the multies, but i thought flow was hard due to the changin of bars...
                    Dawny : Good flow, a bit to simple
                    Witho : Good ending. but the creativity was laking.

                    VOTE: Verbal Outreach
                    I found there verses deeper wiv more fealin in em. and wiv great vocab and flow. my favorite verse was AC3's dues to the complex vocab and good flow........ I was lookin foward to r00ks verse 2#:-(
                    keep it up every1.
                    Last edited by DeVere; 09-01-2005, 07:11 AM.

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                    • #11
                      thx for vote. who lost? haha

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                      • #12
                        Thanks to MC konman for his vote and constructive feed.
                        3-0 KO Verbal Outreach - Nice Battle
                        Last edited by grandhustle19; 09-01-2005, 07:12 AM.

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                        • #13
                          yea thanks for the votes/feed ppl.
                          SECTION 8

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                          • #14
                            thanks props stick around holla 1
                            WITHO

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                            • #15
                              thanks for voting , rep given to those I was allowed

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