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    When I 1ST met u, I knew u were the one,
    When I first saw u my whole body went numb,
    The love I have 4 u is way deeper than just fun,
    And it way deeper more than me just wantin some,
    Cuz if it was I wud of gave up by now,
    After these last 5 years bein treated so foul,
    But I love ya, and I know ive told u before now,
    But im stil waitin here, im stil on the prow,
    And it kills me inside,
    Wen I see u hurt or deprived,
    Becuz u so amazing, u deserve the best from life,
    Baby girl I wish u were mine,
    Cuz baby girl u soo damn fine,
    I wish I cud be wiv u all of the time,
    4 u any mountain I would climb,
    And I know u obsessed wiv the london crews,
    But fink bout it bbz, will they always be there 4 u?
    Will they drop evryfin and come comfort u,
    Weneva u need them2?
    No I know they wont,
    Becuz I know they donít love u the way I do, they just donít!

  • #2
    Bleh. That was not good.

    Grammar and spelling sucked. Bad flow. Stupid, boring subject.

    Way overdone, and you overdid it badly.
    no dough ho, you can't fuck with me!

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    • #3
      i loved it
      FUCK YOU BITCH!!!! YEA YOU

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      • #4
        it was ok man, i cld do wiv sum multies and better vocab.
        but it had good flow, ok structure for a beginer.
        keep it up, youll elevate.

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        • #5
          cheers 4 the compliment, it is like my 1st rap that iv put on the forum!

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