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  • The Devil Got My Back

    I think about spittin my soul likes its on fire
    Jumpin off a buildin coz my expectations keep gettin hire
    Fucked off at the world coz its throwin me nothin but shit
    My way i wanna die but everyone knows i dont wanna admit it
    So i just watch everything good in my life crumble before me
    It feels like im burnin up in side expet i dont feel 1 degree
    Instead i feel cold that god has made me walk with my past
    Beside me and they say lifes short but right now it isnt goin too fast

    The hate, the torture, the ever lastin pain
    We all say were different be we all really the same
    We all got put in this game to do what we do best
    But really its just god fuckin with our minds its really a test

    I've seen to many things to bear and just leave behind
    I wouldnt mind if they went but there the kid
    That stay with you forever and haunt you in your dreams
    Life aint what it seems, people dangerous plottin skeems
    Even your best freind could turn on you like the devil
    Owns there soul and are willing to hurt you on any level
    Of pain they might inflicted physicly and mentaly
    Slammin you down hard the devil dont go gentely

    The hate, the torture, the ever lastin pain
    We all say were different be we all really the same
    We all got put in this game to do what we do best
    But really its just god fuckin with our minds its really a test

    But what people dont realise is the pain other people hold in there eyes
    Tough people cry too motherfuckers friends and family members die
    You tell me if you have never once felt the pain of a loved one lost
    And seein your whole life crumble before you in the compost
    I have the upmost repsect for god but it seems like the devils got a grip
    And hes plannin on helpin me through so he aint about to let slip
    But think the next time you might see your world is never
    But you will be in the hearts of everybody forever
    OH HAI!

  • #2
    it was nice.. but on the side note

    you could up the vocab some.. try to add a little more imagery if ya know what im saying.
    each verse could of been 2 or 3 bars longer, but how much u wrote is kool too.

    can you read the poem i posted on the Poetry Section a little while ago and leave feedback?
    Originally posted by Realize
    evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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    • #3
      thanks man, and ye i know what your gettin at, my vocab and my story tellin and that as got alot and i mean way better than when i first started and sure ima return the favour.
      OH HAI!

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      • #4
        nice piece man
        liked the layout n what stood out most in your content was your 2nd verse specifically the last four bars - tight how you described those lines

        overall good reasonin as well n story telling was a good issue on a deep subject
        nice skript man

        keep @ it

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        • #5
          Well laid out verse. Like ES said your vocab needs some work but other than that you got some skills.

          Peace

          Have you thought of a Name yet??
          _____________________________

          They call me Sinful for a reason.....
          Think about it.....

          _____________________________

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          • #6
            thanks for the feed and no man i been thinkin but theres nothin to suit us, we need atleast 1 more person too,
            OH HAI!

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            • #7
              Nice verse man, i agree wiv ES, the vocab cld be a bit better.
              over all, nice drop. keep it up.

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              • #8
                thanks
                OH HAI!

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