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    yes I know it had no multi's but I wasnt goin for'em in this piece so plz give me feed back on other things

    See I try to put down the pen and pad
    But this has been the only therapist I had
    cuz life leave me angry. sick of reality
    tryin to be worldly, and tryin to be friendly
    but I can't pretend, harsh when I defend
    Who is my friend, seems they all betrayin
    So I stay a loner, n my mind gets deeper
    Help me, dont bother, already ruined by my father
    I got no stability in this life see
    So I await death steadily, no it doesnt bother me
    Cuz we all gonna die, this fact dont intimidate
    No cuz it's fate, accept n life could be great
    You cant change surrondings, daily taken pounding
    I'm already accepting, this is how life's going
    Family in tatters, so what in life matter
    Fuck my stepmother n fuck my father
    Life is shit, what can I make of it
    Gotta take a hit, jus to get through it
    Last edited by CT9; 09-09-2005, 10:21 PM.

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    i felt your frustration in that, its hard for people now-a-days to express a feeling like that without cussing or being just plain retarded

    liked how ya wrote this, keep @ it
    Originally posted by Realize
    evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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    • #3
      ^^alright thx for the feed ES

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      • #4
        Deep. Nice.

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        • #5
          thx for the feed Nixon

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          • #6
            cmon reppin for feed

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            • #7
              Aight
              "My heart aches with the pain, the life in his breath
              We gotta have fun now, theres only minutes left"

              Deshaun Holton
              Rest In Peace Hommie

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              • #8
                thx uppin

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                • #9
                  uppin

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                  • #10
                    uppin

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                    • #11
                      uppin again

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                      • #12
                        uppin

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                        • #13
                          ES stole my wurdz lol...yeah no non-neccessary cursing...i liked that...
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                          • #14
                            This was deep but it lacks of good multis and better vocab and a lil bit more complexity. But flow was good. Keep it up

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                            • #15
                              its aight
                              Originally posted by Jay-z
                              The chain remains, the gang is intact
                              The name is mine, I'll take blame for that
                              The pressures on, but guess who ain't gon' crack?
                              *Ha Ha* Pardon me, I had to laugh at that

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