Quick 16 REP FOR FEED

yes I know it had no multi's but I wasnt goin for'em in this piece so plz give me feed back on other things

See I try to put down the pen and pad
But this has been the only therapist I had
cuz life leave me angry. sick of reality
tryin to be worldly, and tryin to be friendly
but I can't pretend, harsh when I defend
Who is my friend, seems they all betrayin
So I stay a loner, n my mind gets deeper
Help me, dont bother, already ruined by my father
I got no stability in this life see
So I await death steadily, no it doesnt bother me
Cuz we all gonna die, this fact dont intimidate
No cuz it's fate, accept n life could be great
You cant change surrondings, daily taken pounding
I'm already accepting, this is how life's going
Family in tatters, so what in life matter
Fuck my stepmother n fuck my father
Life is shit, what can I make of it
Gotta take a hit, jus to get through it

[EvilSpecialist]

i felt your frustration in that, its hard for people now-a-days to express a feeling like that without cussing or being just plain retarded

liked how ya wrote this, keep @ it

[CT9]

^^alright thx for the feed ES

[R M Nixon]

Deep. Nice.

[CT9]

thx for the feed Nixon

[CT9]

cmon reppin for feed

[Big Slim Dogg]

Aight

[CT9]

thx uppin

[CT9]

uppin

[CT9]

uppin

[CT9]

uppin again

[CT9]

uppin

[Axis]

ES stole my wurdz lol...yeah no non-neccessary cursing...i liked that...

[AC3]

This was deep but it lacks of good multis and better vocab and a lil bit more complexity. But flow was good. Keep it up

[Encor3]

its aight