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    Time 2 Think

    [Verse 1]
    Frozen innocence in her eyes of luminous sands
    I watched her skin reflect the light that bled through her strands
    As she made her way off the plane, want to cry, but I resist tears
    If it wasnít for ever meeting her, I wouldnít ever exist here
    She runs over, hugs me, I stroll my hand through her brunette roots
    feeling her cold arms around my neck, and I never wanted to had left you
    but everything went fuzzy, and I woke up in the middle of the night, heart imploding
    Its dark and Iím cold and the windows are open
    Go to shut them back down, they wont budge because the frames broken
    Could of swore I saw a after image of my baby floating
    outside my bedroom window, Iím delusional and light headed
    go back to lying down, thinking of your eyes looking like diamonds embedded
    since I have some time to think


    [Chorus] [repeat x2]
    every day is valuable, we may have conflicts and scream
    but you always know how to make me smile and give me self-esteem
    stress covers me a lot, I try to shake it
    I owe you a lot now that Iíve have some time to start thinking


    [Verse 2]
    I wake in the morning, my brain doesnít swing into function
    when I rise from my bed, and I can hear the springs crunching
    reach over to the caller ID, thumbing the erase key
    your number donít show up, you probably hate me
    yell at you for trying to make me bloom a smile, Iím so ashamed
    I lie under my sheets hoping you dial my number, so I can apologize for my ways
    Reach on the table for your envelope so I can glimpse your hand-writing
    my eyes are wet, and no time soon planned to be drying
    by now my tearís moisture has trickled down the paper
    My cheeks are flushed by the cold mist you can see in my crystal vapor
    I dread the frost, but without you, life instead costs
    a simple nothing, go and sigh with a steady exhaust
    Taking all my thoughts in at once, while I have some time to think


    [Chorus] [repeat x2]

    [Verse 3]
    I miss you a lot, its sad hearing the details alone
    starting to get chapped lips because my tears are turning into hail stones
    I donít realize Iím getting sick, still anticipating the moment the phone rings
    try to pull the covers over my body, but my hands donít cling
    my arms have departed and depleted all intensions of lifting
    I live for you, you can hear my heart talking to itself about you if you listen
    I miss you rubbing up my chest, I can smell your aroma
    With a last tear, I slowly start to dwell into a coma
    And I step into a endless sleep, the phones getting a call
    All you can hear all the echoes slipping off the walls
    and you leave a message, saying you forgive me, and still want to be engaged
    and you still love me, but Iím not awake to hear it


    Dedicated to Amanda S. Horton
    Originally posted by Realize
    evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

  • #2
    hey man, good vocab, good flow good emotion.
    u put lots of skill into this 1 man, i like it.
    9/10 brilliant, keep it up man.

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    • #3
      thanx konman, rep u when i can

      uppin.. come on! 9 views and only 1 reply?
      Originally posted by Realize
      evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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      • #4
        uppin..
        Originally posted by Realize
        evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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        • #5
          I felt this drop...
          Vocab made this nice for me, threw multies in there but didnt over do them ya know, some people just throw multies in so they have multies....it was just wrote well, can feel the emotion, good imagery/vocab in this... 8.5/10 for sure ...
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          • #6
            I liked chorus , but you need more multis and flow was off at some parts. But overall shit was very good.

            And I dont hate you cuz you upset grandhustle19

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            • #7
              uppin
              Originally posted by Realize
              evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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              • #8
                good content, it was a different concept, but like everything written you understand the vibe the person trying to put through when said, so mayn lay that sucker down on a nice beat, u dig

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                • #9
                  Originally posted by AC3
                  And I dont hate you cuz you upset grandhustle19
                  lmfao, kool kool
                  Originally posted by Realize
                  evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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                  • #10
                    that was good...multis were good where they were...no more multis were needed....cuz most of the time ppl just try to force them when there not needed...
                    Idk but I didn't really like the hook...it was alright...but idk...there sumthin' about it i just don't like...
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                    • #11
                      good flow i liked it 9.5/10
                      yall done fucked up now endagered the industry better be prepared it's the return of conspiracy

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