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    im practicin, tryin to elevate. so if you can giv me feed on this, id be real greatful.

    murderouse minds, with split personalities
    tragidies inflicted by words, to recommit casualties.
    No skill, style of your own, ill leave you anemic.
    your not used to raw skill, you cant even read it.
    you cant twist this bitch, you know your gonna lose
    after we through your injuries distinctive like gang tattoos.
    mother couldnt afford an abortion, your family hate you
    accident plus rapist, recipe to create you.
    your ass is paraplegic, thats the way you were born
    rhymes are strategic, to murder hard like snuff porn.
    your relatives kill themsleves to get away from you
    free as a jigilo, only way sluts play-wiv-you.
    your family is ashamed of you, you got a failed life
    family joke is aimed-at-you, you pointless like a blunt knife.
    rhyms to my ears causes devastation
    wacker then a guy wiv no dick, tryin to do masturbation.
    my words are aimed at you, recieve a direct hit
    best believe i rip emcees who dont giv respect kid.
    this is the master u battlin, better believe it
    ill make ya die slow, wiv your loved ones there to see it.
    take this rap game, kill every name alphabetically
    theoretically my rhymes scar generations genetically
    leave your life trashed and totaled sympathetically
    leave your skull smashed and your vocals disturbed mentally.
    you shouldnt battle people above your league
    especially people you dont know, youll get combat fatigue
    fuckin kids, why do you speak my name in the first place?
    you duck this diss, destroy your home And your birth place.
    Dont try to fight me, survival isnt likely.
    only time you hurt me wen i laugh so hard at you bein taken likely.

    feed plz, ill rep ya.
    Last edited by DeVere; 09-14-2005, 09:57 AM.

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    i liked this alot

    at times you have good vocab, than it dropped, than it went back up there again, try to keep consistancy

    if i was you, i'd just write a song, whats the point in writing single verses when you want to elevate? try to construct a song and put work into it, push the envolope, that'll help ya get better

    keep @ it
    Originally posted by Realize
    evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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    • #3
      ok, thnx loads man. ill rep wen i can.
      uppin.

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      • #4
        good piece mate. ur very good. i liked the close of the verse. very good lol. keep at it

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        • #5
          Yea it was def a pretty good piece. Had some multis, good vocab, and a pretty good flow. Are you in the new crew in here?

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          • #6
            thnx loads pplz. rep ya wen i can.
            no CT9, im not in a crew.

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            • #7
              nice rhymes konman, I love the multies 3/4 of the way down. Keep up the good work.

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              • #8
                thnx man, uppin

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                • #9
                  uppin

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                  • #10
                    Nice verse Konman, I liked the punchlines, and your flow was good too, I didnt see it mess up at all. Keep trying to elevate and you'll be great.
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                    • #11
                      hey thnx loads man. rep ya wen i can.
                      uppin

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                      • #12
                        Originally posted by MC konman
                        you cant twist this, you know your gonna lose
                        after we through, your injuries distinctive like gang tattoos.

                        your ass is paraplegic, thats the way you were born
                        my rhymes are strategic, to murder you hard like snuff porn.

                        your family is ashamed of you, you got a failed life
                        family joke is aimed-at-you, you pointless like a blunt knife.
                        I loved these ^^^ Good work





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                        • #13
                          hey thnx man, uppin

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                          • #14
                            wel hasnt someone got a lot of feed lol it was good man u elevatin
                            OH HAI!

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                            • #15
                              not bad...i read it over the beat of He We Go Again...By:Game...and it flowed almost perfectly...prolly sum of your best work...
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