Never Good Enough (feedback = 180+ rep)

[EvilSpecialist]

Never Good Enough

I知 never good enough for you, no matter how often I change.
I知 crying over my kitchen sink, having tears run off in a drain.
Try being always less of what your love suspects.
I stare through tears at your chain that tugs my neck;
Wondering what is me changing going to revolutionize?
Even if it fix痴 current things, at some point evolution dies.
Going back to same situations, trying to repair damage just increases complications.
100% in to see our relationship fall to pieces leaves frustrations.
I知 upset because of what we together constructed
burned down in a bit of rage and is forever dusting
by remaining breezes that still keeps a little bit in tact
Me loving you is still the mist of the little bit of cracks
of my heart, I知 sorry I知 not good enough
Im not sure if it's done, there might be some things i'll wanna change, but tell me what ya think

[MC SinFul]

Not bad. The vocab and emotion are the highlites of this. Flow was nice and those multis are gettin really good.

[tomo_raul]

yo , im a start out MC and wondered could someone explain to me all the knowledge about writing, i know the basics but i dont get multis etc...

it would be a great help to me if some one could post up all the words like multis and an example of them , thanks tom

[MC Fresh]

i liked this one man you should make it better though it would be a really good read

[EvilSpecialist]

i just typed it as i went, i didnt really think too much, i rearranged some stuff when i was done, but other than that, i just started typing and went with it

[Symptom]

Enjoyed.

Fave line:

Wondering what is me changing going to revolutionize?
Even if it fix’s current things, at some point evolution dies

^Good multis.

Multis were intact, vocab was great. Nothing much to improve on.

Except this:

I’m upset because of what we together constructed
burned down in a bit of rage and is forever dusting

^"Dusting" doesn't rhyme. Change it to "dustin'," although I'm sure that's what you meant to do... right? *Hold gun point at head* RIGHT?! Nah, JP.

Keep at it, EvilSpecialist.

Your girl,
Symptom.

P.S.- 8/10. Now where's my rep?

[EvilSpecialist]

i probably ment to put 'construction' but its not done yet.. im not really satisfied with it, im the pick-iest person u'll ever meet

[Symptom]

^I bet. My sister is when it comes to eating.

No meaning to flood.

[EvilSpecialist]

where ya been anyways symptom? havent seen ya

[Symptom]

^Man a lot of people said I been away.

I dunno, I guess I needed time away from the Board. Lolness at me treatin' this like a real thing.

But once I joined www.hiphopemcees.com/forums, I fell in love with it. Then it became dead, once I livened it up, and fell back into D12 World. I kinda like ditched D12 there for about a week. Came back.

I love this Board with a passion.

It's just that Hip Hop Emcees is gay, and you have to post links to get feedback, or they close your threads. But they also have really good rappers, that give really good feedback, of course, never like mine, though, and they are weird. But whatever.

I'm back now, so be happy. Lolness.

[Symptom]

Why did you bad rep me? You retard.

[EvilSpecialist]

um i didnt, i gd repped u

[Bobby McDigital]

not bad, i didnt get the flow of it down but then again i ahd a rock song playin while i read it

[Blaze87]

shit is crazy kid

[Tupac_Shakur121]

not bad i really liked it man keep it up