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  • The beggin of the END!!

    CHECK IT!

    its the beginning of the end, but where do i begin//
    cant even walk down the street, without commitin a sin//
    im sick of this shit, why all these fuckin rulez//
    why cant we live our lives to the fullest, not act like damn toolz//
    i can understand not to kill, and not stealing//
    but why not cuss or say GOD!!, they are just words, you know what im feeling?!?//
    when the end comes, you never know where you gonna end up//
    it seems as though your neutral, but u better think again//
    i bet u dont really know it, but youve comitted almost every sin//
    it seems like god wants us to be perfect, never makin mistakes//
    why does he make us pay such a big price for the mistakes we make//
    i just dont understand why we should be so perfect, look at the world today//
    if u know u made mistakes, take ur silly ass to church and fuckin pray//
    i just dont understand why we should believe something we dont see//
    on that subject i know some of yall will agree with me!//
    i mean i wanna see this man that has created the whole universe//
    yall hit me back on this subject, that means i just ended this verse//



    PEEP IT!!!!

  • #2
    I Feel ya dog....Nice verse...Easy flow..really really good...
    Keep'em up playa!!

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    • #3
      ???

      any1 else wanna comment on the freestyle!!

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      • #4
        if you want my opinion, this rhyme doesn't have very good flow, and the concept seems a little unclear and all over the place.

        There were numerous parts where the syllables just didn't flow together, example: i just dont understand why we should be so perfect, look at the world today//
        if u know u made mistakes, take ur silly ass to church and fuckin pray//

        and i guess a lot of it just isn't clear on what you're saying
        What the hell can i say I'm just a rookie/ but if you happen to come my way don't over look me

        wins:

        losses: Johnny Blazez

        "I couldn't help but notice your pain"

        -"My pain?"

        "It runs deep...share it with me!"

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