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    It Not that good but i thought i would post to see what you think! will Rep 4 feed!

    why do girls hav 2 b confusing
    make me wanna go all snoozing
    always thinkin about themselves
    n dat guys should b stackd up on the shelves

    screw wat they say
    i dont care they all gay
    trying to get me hurt
    na i got strength like kurt.

    im not saying im gay
    just girls hurt n make ya pay
    they dnt care how you feel
    girl go ahead and kneel

    i no you like to give head
    and lyin on the bed all spread
    go get ya boy to give me a crack
    ill get my bat give him a smack
    UWE: The New Era Of Efeds

  • #2
    yea bro it not 2 great but u getting better at doing ur freestyles
    yall done fucked up now endagered the industry better be prepared it's the return of conspiracy

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    • #3
      uppin
      UWE: The New Era Of Efeds

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      • #4
        Work Harder

        I liked it ight. It was descent. But you're in much need of practice. Too simplistic. Not enough multis or metaphores. I like the subject matter though.

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        • #5
          yea im not that good but Thanks!!
          UWE: The New Era Of Efeds

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          • #6
            it was ok,but i sounded a bit more like poetry than a freestyle. guess it all depends on how somebody reads it but thats how it came across. try to make it a big longer with more multis and add a few punchlines to make it more complex. not too bad tho.

            i think if you try using more than four or five words in every line it will give you a better chance to expand your vocab and like i say, more room to mess about tryin to add some multis and wordplay/metaphors. try droppin usin longer bars with more multis etc and see if the feedback is any better.

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