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  • "To Whom It May Concern" (Emotion One For Me)

    This piece was inspired by one of Richard's song titles (Rhymez_Internal), and also by one of Atmosphere's songs, "Little Man."

    Enjoy (T) Hehe, that's a pretty neato telephone!

    Dear God,
    I know I've been a little on the bad-side
    Enclosed in the sins I commit while on my mad-side
    But to conquer the fears that bundle up my thoughs
    I need more than a pat on the back to encourage whats fought
    Churning inside myself to become a better-person
    Debatin' the explicit content to form better-verses
    Explaining my feelings to a degree taht's suitable
    Making excuse to sooth the sins I commit stewed-in-bull
    Tryin' to live life right, for You've given-me-much
    But I feel I take it for granted without livin'-with-love
    It's funny how I promised both You-and-I
    For a better feeling I wouldn't lose-in-tides
    But it seems that's too far fetched a reailty-for-me
    Disgraced in the business of irght an wrong, it's spacin' out on me
    Misin' the heart to heart, and how close we used-to-be
    I'm reachin' for Your arm, but it's not where it used-to-be

    Chorus 2x (By pandemic):

    Love comes and goes and I don't understand it
    One thing I do know is that I'll never take it for granted
    Cherish each moment with y'all and we keepin' it strong
    This one's for y'all; your love is deep in this song

    Dear Family,
    Take a look into my eyes, and you'll see-my-soul
    The enriched part of me taht alwasy tries to reach-for-gold
    How simplicit a conversation can be if you tried
    Instead of stormin' off to go our separate ways of our lives
    To exchange our love to one another, never conceal
    But havin' this as a reality seems to be way too surreal
    Never the sitcom family, but we sure put effort
    Strivin' to take care of one another with more than effort
    Always a pact to be at every special event
    SPending' happy times to gether in which God He-sent
    But sittin' on the barrier of love and hate sculpts-our-lives
    We never sipped for chances, we always gulped-for-life
    Perplexed with problems, we let it out on eachother
    OUr own punching bags, but enlightment to reach-others
    Always trusted our minds, and love unconditionally to last-ages
    And for that, I give you all I can - a spot in my rap-pages

    Chorus 2x:

    Love comes and goes and I don't understand it
    One thing I do know is that I'll never take it for granted
    Cherish each moment with y'all and we keepin' it strong
    This one's for y'all; your love is deep in this song

    Dear Friends,
    Although we never show it, we apprecaite-our-time
    Whether it be hard, or loveable to abbreviate-our-life
    Some have stayed true, others chose to re-evaluate
    Pass me up in the hall ways - you see-a-valid-hate
    To missed times, to the penetration of regret
    You've all stayed real, even though you change and forget
    But I remember - you all accepted-me
    To the best of my knowledge have always respected-me
    Time goes on, and we'll soon part-our-ways
    But far into the future, you remain in my heart-today
    Goin' through adolescence together, it's used-to-me-to-know
    That we share a common background - it takes more than puberty-to-grow
    Intelligence flooed our new judgement
    Even though we've changed, I'm startin' to love-it
    Everythign you do, it seems to rot-in-my-heart
    But witout your support, I'll never have gotten-this-far

    For every heartless breath-we-take
    For every worthless step-we-make
    For all the stupid things-we've-done
    For all the fartfetch things-we've-stunned
    For all the profaned words-we've-spoke
    For all the poems in the world-we've-wrote
    For every ounce of pain on earth
    For every glass of liqour poured on the curb
    For every child that's born every minute
    For every thing we start, that we never finish
    For all the people that are starving
    For all the lives that have scarring
    For all the the frustration that's delt
    I realize I'm only writin' 'bout myself

    Chorus 2x:

    Love comes and goes and I don't understand it
    One thing I do know is that I'll never take it for granted
    Cherish each moment with y'all and we keepin' it strong
    This one's for y'all; your love is deep in this song

    And please - leave ADEQUATE feed.
    Last edited by Symptom; 03-22-2006, 06:56 PM.
    Love, live life, proceed, progress

  • #2
    Wow. . . are you kidding me?

    Uppin' this bad boy.
    Love, live life, proceed, progress

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    • #3
      That was probably the best I've read from you.

      I especially love the ending.. not every song needs a chorus/hook either, I think this could even do fine without it, even if it were to become an audio.

      Awesome job.
      Now let the night be dark for all of me.
      Let the night be too dark for me to see
      Into the future. Let what will be, be.'

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      • #4
        ^Thank you very much.

        Uppin'.
        Love, live life, proceed, progress

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        • #5
          Yeah, it's probably one of your best songs lyrically. The lyrics expressed everything in a wonderful way. Multis are nice too. I love everythin' in this probably equally. Don't stop. Let me on your songs while you're at it.

          Here's a chorus:

          Love comes and goes and I don't understand it
          One thing I do know is that I'll never take it for granted
          Cherish each moment with y'all and we keepin' it strong
          This one's for y'all; your love is deep in this song

          Peace.
          Last edited by pandemic; 03-22-2006, 06:38 PM.
          P!

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          • #6
            Thanks, buddy!

            I'll edit that in.

            Uppin' for feed.
            Love, live life, proceed, progress

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            • #7
              umm i dont even know what to say cause everthing i can think of has been said this song is the shit and i agrre wit psycho69 bout the hook thing
              yall done fucked up now endagered the industry better be prepared it's the return of conspiracy

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              • #8
                Ahaha Symptom Actually Dropped A Full Song!!! No Shit... I"m In To Much Shock To Leave Feed~~!!!
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                • #9
                  WOW that song was straight fire, i liked it because of the way that u stayed in topic not like other people that go off topic on a song but nice looks like u put real pasion in this one!!!!!!!!

                  P.S. GET A MIKE!!!!!! THIS WILL BE HOT IN AUDIO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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                  • #10
                    Can you belive this girl's only 15?(You still are only 15 right?) Anyway that drop right there was your heart on a platter really. I enjoyed every line in it, because it's all real and never foolish. I really like the ending of it

                    For every heartless breath-we-take
                    For every worthless step-we-make
                    For all the stupid things-we've-done
                    For all the fartfetch things-we've-stunned
                    For all the profaned words-we've-spoke
                    For all the poems in the world-we've-wrote
                    For every ounce of pain on earth
                    For every glass of liqour poured on the curb
                    For every child that's born every minute
                    For every thing we start, that we never finish
                    For all the people that are starving
                    For all the lives that have scarring
                    For all the the frustration that's delt
                    I realize I'm only writin' 'bout myself

                    ^ it just seemed so right I guess.


                    I liked every single line in every single verse but my favorite verse was the one about your family. If I had to highlight lines that I really liked I'd choose the ones below..


                    Goin' through adolescence together, it's used-to-me-to-know
                    That we share a common background - it takes more than puberty-to-grow

                    ^ very nicely done.


                    Always trusted our minds, and love unconditionally to last-ages
                    And for that, I give you all I can - a spot in my rap-pages

                    ^thumbs up.



                    Probably some of the best stuff dropped on the board in a while I'm givin' you a 9/10 on this one and that rarely happens but in this case I fell it suitable. Amazingly well done. Good job.


                    Rick.
                    The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

                    I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

                    With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


                    Got It?

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                    • #11
                      Originally posted by Symptom
                      For every heartless breath-we-take
                      For every worthless step-we-make
                      For all the stupid things-we've-done
                      For all the fartfetch things-we've-stunned
                      For all the profaned words-we've-spoke
                      For all the poems in the world-we've-wrote
                      For every ounce of pain on earth
                      For every glass of liqour poured on the curb
                      For every child that's born every minute
                      For every thing we start, that we never finish
                      For all the people that are starving
                      For all the lives that have scarring
                      For all the the frustration that's delt
                      I realize I'm only writin' 'bout myself
                      .
                      That was great. One of the best songs i've seen from you ever. I mean the maturity in the song makes you seem a lot, lot older and well the part that i've quoted above was so true about life and it did just seem perfect in the song. I don't think you could have made the song much better than it was to be honest. I think it'd sound great on audio because it seemed to have so much feeling and meaning in it and i think that would come across great in audio. I can't fault that. brilliant concept and executed amazingly. True talent. Nice chorus added from pandemic too. 10/10 no lie!
                      twitter.com/thisistc

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                      • #12
                        ^Yeah, just work on ya mic presence and anythin' else and you should be straight. Rap is way more than lyrics and flow. Your ability to perform in real life is very important as well. You gotta memorize your lyrics to actual full songs and be able to spit them with great charisma that's identified as yours and everythin' has to come natural. It's gonna take a load of work, but why would anyone wanna be respected for a talent that happened over night? Trust me when I say it's worth it. I'd say when you feel the time is right, get out in the real world and actually do a whole lot of somethin' with your rap shit. Send a tight demo to someone who will handle your talent the best way as possible, rip up a cypher, battle people, etc.

                        Peace.
                        P!

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                        • #13
                          Wow, I really appreciate all of this feedback.

                          No harm in havin' it keepin' comin'!
                          Love, live life, proceed, progress

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                          • #14
                            Uppin'.
                            Love, live life, proceed, progress

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                            • #15
                              DAMN GIRL, that song was HOT. Mad props on that, honestly one of the best pieces i have ever read on the internet. You lived up to my expectations, and even surpassed them. Keep it up girl.

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