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  • make it freestyle

    when i was younger i was told i wouldnt exceed
    hopless i shouldnt even have a dream
    but now im older im coming full force
    do i want this rap thing of course
    i gotta show the haters
    what its like to make the paper
    now they saying truth you shinning
    i know i gotta wear sun glasses cause im blinding


    this is only my second freestyle
    leave constructive feed if its bad just tell me what i need to work on
    ^ YEA I REALLY SAID THAT GOT A PROBLEM

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    Lines are too short
    no multis
    not so good flow
    no wordplay
    don't see any punchlines
    Originally posted by 7Eleven7
    A NICE BIG BLACK COCK IS WHATS UP
    Originally posted by M Solo
    now you have a video of me kicking my ass. That you will never post because there is not video.
    RB who is the fraud? Me or Asif.
    lolzx

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    • #3
      ok i will work on it just learning
      ^ YEA I REALLY SAID THAT GOT A PROBLEM

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