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  • "Give Back."-Ridiculous Rick

    "Give Back"- Ridiculous Rick

    Verse #1:
    I'm searchin for perks, with no gas ta get to work,
    My stomach hurts, so I'm actin' like a jerk,
    And I know past due bill lerk, in my mailbox,
    Sittin' in the rockies but I ain't flashin rocks,
    I'm stuck somewhere between gourmet and slop,
    It all seems the same, watered down and mundane,
    I see beauty in portaits that to others seem plain,
    Showin' motion, with blood & tear drenched devotion,
    Swingin' swift cause they'd love to see my demotion,
    But I never felt like I got raised, it's a phase,
    I must be gettin punked and played these days,
    Writin' intellect text but I'm cashin' bum checks,
    Waitin' ta collect, with pockets filled with lint specks,
    So I tune to these tracks, that help me adapt,
    They've been good to me so it's time to give back.



    Ending Comments:
    Some new shit I wrote quickly just to get something out, don't want to stay idle for to long let me know what you think.
    Last edited by New Guy; 01-31-2007, 12:37 AM.
    The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

    I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

    With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


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  • #2
    Need more multis and wordplay.
    Originally posted by 7Eleven7
    A NICE BIG BLACK COCK IS WHATS UP
    Originally posted by M Solo
    now you have a video of me kicking my ass. That you will never post because there is not video.
    RB who is the fraud? Me or Asif.
    lolzx

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    • #3
      Good lookin' out on the feedback, but other then wordplay and mutli's how'd you feel about it?
      The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

      I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

      With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


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      • #4
        Holla.
        The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

        I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

        With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


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        • #5
          oh, It was nice, couple parts I didn't get but work on multis and wordplay and keep flow and it you should be great in no time.
          Originally posted by 7Eleven7
          A NICE BIG BLACK COCK IS WHATS UP
          Originally posted by M Solo
          now you have a video of me kicking my ass. That you will never post because there is not video.
          RB who is the fraud? Me or Asif.
          lolzx

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          • #6
            ^
            The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

            I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

            With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


            Got It?

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            • #7
              Uppin'.
              The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

              I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

              With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


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              • #8
                It's okay, but it lacked punch man. There were no misses, but you weren't swinging very hard- change a couple of lines into haymakers and this will be hot.

                It seems like you started with something to say, and then rhymed about it. I usually wait until I think of a hotass lyric, and build the song around that. Your way is a lot harder, but still possible man you just gotta keep that hotness in mind.

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