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  • New Rhyme from the Diva!

    Ok y'all this is kinda like a continuation of my first rhyme. Still deals with the same subject matter, but this one's a bit longer, so I might have to divide it up into 2 verses. Just in case any of you are wondering Brian Shin (this guy with really long spikes in his hair that he dyed hot pink with purple tips) and Andy are two guys at my school that have dissed me so I had to mention them. I think they were fags cuz they were the only two guys to hate on me and there were all these rumors that I was jocking their best friend so i think they got jealous or something. lol Ok enjoy and please rate it k?

    It's the D12 D-I-V-A the girl that'll be all up in the face/ of any fucker talking bout peeps of mixed race/ you don't wanna know how I got the shady in my name/ boys spit game and I just sit back and laugh/ all the attempts made are lame and mostly crap/ Iím still waiting for my prince that got the charm/ any other bitch that comes along is gonna get harmed/ got me paranoid pulling out both my arms/ no not the body parts Iím talking about these glocks/ I watch my back like a hawk, my guard never drops/ You know you got way too many enemies/ When you go on a shopping spree and see one working at your fave boutique/ My shit listís so long itís no longer a list/ Itís a novel complete with table of contents/ Logging all the years Iíve pissed off my peers/ Dogging on the queers making them shed tears/ Itís like everyday Iíve made a new foe/ I start some shit wherever I go/ And the sad part is itís not even my fault/ In her heart the bitch got jealousy woes/ And the sad thing is some guys hate on me too/ Like that fag Brian Shin and his punk ass crew/ Andy dickridin him trying to be cool/ its so amazing it'll leave you hypnotized/ everyday Iím sicked on by these dick sucking guys/ teased taunted and terrorized always the one to be victimized/ being different has gotten me nothing/ but always being the target of hunting/ and always making me the blunt in/ all the jokes by these boys who're constantly frontin/ pissed off cuz they never got to experience/ to hit it off with me and never got serious/ I ain't delirious I just know why a boy will dis a lady/ either his heart's broken or he's gay see/ a lot of faggots need to boost their self esteem/ cuz they embarrassed so they pick on me/ ever since a girl named annie challenged me Iíve been kinda panicky/ its not that Iím scared for her to fight me/ its that I can't believe so many dare to dislike me

  • #2
    that's some tight shit diva, keep it up, i like the way u diss.

    by the way, can u check my shit titled, a little freestyle i wrote. thanx
    eviltwin

    the beginning of the end (defeated list)

    catastrophe aka controversial
    K11
    jen
    Jay Kruup
    purplehaze
    graffix
    DJ-Scidazals
    underworld (x2)
    hotacid a.k.a. kid technic
    thacrippla
    crizazy (x2)
    eggnoj
    jgravy
    DJ Adzy
    X-tacy

    loses

    eggnoj
    mc maximus prime
    AK47
    prominant
    revenant

    peeps i lost to but beat later

    eggnoj

    battle record- 20-5

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    • #3
      Feedbak

      That was a descent rhyme...but some of your bars didnt rhyme, you can make your rhyme sound better by putting multi's in your rhymes such as this bar:

      "you don't wanna know how I got the shady in my name/
      boys spit game and I just sit back and laugh/"

      If you made the end of the second bar rhyme with 'game' then that would sound a lot better and multi's always make rhymes sound better! so anyway, nice piece of work...

      Keep Rhymin, Keep Postin...

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      • #4
        yeah that was tight shit for the mostpart, but like my mans in front of me said, some of the bars didnt rhyme....jus go back over that shit and keep it up...

        -storms
        OH IT'S TRUE...IT'S VERY FUKKIN TRUE!!!

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        • #5
          Uppin for more peeps to see

          Thanx guys. Yeah that line did seem a little awkward. I wanted to make the first half rhyme with the last line, but also end the line with "laugh" so it would rhyme with "crap." Thanx for showing that out to me it would have sound better if I made the whole line rhyme.

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          • #6
            Nice Job Diva......

            Yo,That was a tight line ya spit.Good flow and word use.I Like ur style...Real hot,Keep'em up.........
            Maybe We Can Collaborate on a song or rhyme or somethin...Hit me back...Nice Spit..

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            • #7
              Thanx CoNtRoVeRsIaL. I'd love to collaberate with you on something. I've been checking out some of your shit and its tight. And for all y'all reading this be sure to go to the battle board and vote on the Newbie battle between me, goodson, and alivesoldier.

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              • #8
                shady diva that was tite i def liekd it...more complex rhyme schemes n metaphors would have made it even better. if you get to it please vote on my battle with invincible on "calling out invincible" and the newbie tourny cocaine vs. ak47 vs. dirtyharry88, thanx, peace
                ***DH rocks all ya***

                THA CARTEL:

                dirtyharry88 a.K.a Da Kingpin
                Underworld a.K.a M. KILLA
                Lyrikally Lost a.K.a BLOOPERZ
                The Don a.K.a DON JUAN
                Shady Grl a.K.a CARTEL FIRST LADY
                Cocaine a.K.a DA INHIBITOR
                Cad a.K.a THA DESPERADO
                Dopemaster a.K.a Lyrical Dopemaster
                Nafareus a.K.a TED BUNDY
                Expencesive a.K.a INVISIBLE MAN
                Acidlow a.K.a LYRICAL SMOKER
                xl a.K.a MR BIG
                Synical a.K.a UP-FRONT


                ~~THE 13 DEMONS~~

                "LYRICALLY DEFUSED"

                -J GRAVY(3-0)

                "Those that live in glass houses should not throw rocks"- Churchill

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                • #9
                  That was really good Diva. I think people always write much better material when it's based on a real-life event or emotion. Nice rhyme.
                  ...I just came to eat ya mother out...

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                  • #10
                    its all good

                    yo i think yo rhymes are Dope!!!
                    they flow well. all yo need is a good beet and a record deal!!
                    keep it up booya!!!
                    girls (y'all a some god damn girls)
                    why do you act this way? (why do you act this way, huh?)
                    why do y'all act like fuckin sissies you pussies keep talkin shit behind my back you just some bitches for that and we all know (we all know)
                    how fuckin cowards roll (keep rollin rollin rollin)
                    and fuckin britneys who pretend to be down but as soon as someone calls you out you put your tail between your legs and bow down

                    Fuck Bizkit

                    DoggZ:

                    X-TACY
                    J-Dogg

                    -------------battle stats-----------------
                    WINS
                    Chronic-X (3-0)

                    LOSSES
                    kk420(5-0)

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                    • #11
                      Tight shit

                      That shit iz koo i liked it iight well im out peace
                      ~~Kirsten A*K*A* Kitty~~
                      Don't judge me you don't know me and you ain't me so keep you 2 penny's to yourself I have enough penny's I dont need yours

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