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    Mom told me I've got to face reality
    But I've done all I can to escape reality
    And it's gon' take forever to taste a salary
    Not until I charge me up and replace the battery
    She told me not to mourn and to take the tragedies....
    Build myself around them and make me a better person
    Even when the weather worsens and I can't face the casualties
    She told me good things come to an end
    And that you've always got to finish what you begin
    Cause karma is a hurtful thing and will construct you a trench
    But you can always patch things up with God and make him love you again
    She told me there are two kinds of people
    There's ones who'll be there for you and a kind of evil
    A lot of rats are disguised as friends who will try and eat you
    So befriend the friends who befriend friends who won't lie and cheat you
    She told me to be careful with who I date
    Pick a girl who likes a subject where I can to relate
    Don't pick the first girl out of the line up who steps to the plate
    Keep your options open, a lot can be spoken when I make few mistakes
    She told me that life is made up of choices
    A lot of people hide behind their make up and voices
    She told me follow these guidelines and you will succeed
    Just keep your head up, make the right decision to fulfill your needs....
    Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

  • #2
    pretty good man, lots of topics in this and i like how you did that

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    • #3
      Thanks Bro.
      Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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      • #4
        If your mom told you all that advice she's one smart lady. This is a softer side of you. I like this piece a lot there's really no highlight lines or anything the whole thing in general is good.
        The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

        I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

        With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


        Got It?

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        • #5
          Thanks Bro.
          Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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          • #6
            I think the variety is what makes this rap. The fact you started out every few lines with a fresh topic, with little elaboration, beginning with "She told me" is purely great. I like how you identified who "she" was at the beginning, providing some clarification. The rhyme scheme was good, and I don't think there is a single line that wasn't fresh in this whole verse. Your multis were on point, and your metaphors were strictly upper level. Props.

            Fave part:

            "Mom told me I've got to face reality
            But I've done all I can to escape reality
            And it's gon' take forever to taste a salary
            Not until I charge me up and replace the battery
            She told me not to mourn and to take the tragedies....
            Build myself around them and make me a better person
            Even when the weather worsens and I can't face the casualties"

            All of that is just brilliant.

            Job well done.
            Love, live life, proceed, progress

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            • #7
              Good Looks Symptom. I'll RTF Here Soon. You Too Rick.
              Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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              • #8
                lyrics and subject all on point and pretty damn truth.
                great start on opening line and dope finisher. interesting
                read it all kinda matches wit meaning behind this piece is
                dope. tight writing

                "She told me follow these guidelines and you will succeed
                Just keep your head up, make the right decision to fulfill your needs...."
                R.I.P Proof
                ......
                get higher, get higher i never retire
                there is only two states to be in.. NSW & Stoned

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                • #9
                  Hey people I'm Still Returning The Favor. Just Been Busy. I Got Yall Though Tomorrow. Props Deadline.
                  Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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                  • #10
                    That's really tight. Id love to hear audio of that.

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                    • #11
                      the vocab in this really draws it all into perspective

                      this is a very well put together rhyme with context in convex, very nice

                      Ive never read any of your rhymes man but this is impressive so far
                      “If you keep coming back that only means you know you lost the fight...
                      But their pride just won’t let em, insides like go get em
                      and I’m just like, why you trying to fight momentum” EMINEM

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                      • #12
                        ^ you're lame! lmfao





                        nice shit man.. i love the flow and multis :D
                        LOST
                        THEN I NEVER WANT TO DIE
                        I... I WANT TO LIVE FOREVER










                        8.12.04

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                        • #13
                          Welcome back Vis...somehow missed this (no idea how looking at the date...)

                          This seriously is a brilliant way of summing up life, great words of wisdom and guidance, if your mother really told you those things, you should be very grateful to have her around (which i got no doubt you are). Very constructive, very well written, very good subject matter, some brilliant lines (A lot of rats are disguised as friends who will try and eat you, So befriend the friends who befriend friends who won't lie and cheat you..) altogether a dope drop, shame you dont record as well. Where you been anyway?
                          Taylor

                          Adrenaline peaks when someone relevant speaks....

                          www.myspace.com/taylorsmusicuk

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                          • #14
                            Only time vision tastes a salary is when he swallows his welfare check
                            aka smokey

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                            • #15
                              Good Looks On Feed Everyone. Props Taylor. Yeah I'm At A Different Board, But Even There I Haven't Been Dropping As Much. I'm Starting To Get Back Into It Though. This Was My First Piece Back In Awhile. How You Been? I See You Still Dropping.

                              And Smokey, When You're Done Trying To Get A Laugh Out Of Someone, Then You Can Feed My Piece. Until Then, Enjoy Life And Don't Waste Time Coming Into Threads To Post Stupidity.
                              Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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