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    It's hard to keep my own focus. People should know this. /
    I'm under heat by the evilest cold shit /
    spawned by the deceitful, so I'm needy and hopeless. /
    We all struggle to legally cope wit' /
    some of God's creations whether spiritual
    or physical... / So are we all opponents? /
    Can I please have a moment? / The glass is half-full,
    but fact is it's still half-empty, so see where it goes, kid. /
    You really have to be through this whole shit /
    like all the other brothers who feed they own bullshit. /
    I need some food for thought; not the greed and the full clips. /
    Lead me to grow it or I bleed and I show it. /
    I got a few left in me, but I'll leave like most poets, /
    yet there's no legacy to jus' flow wit'. /

    Peace.
    P!

  • #2
    I thought youd put your pen away? Real nice flow in this, nice drop mate, even though the way youve typed it up kind of made it hard to follow the flow in places. Nice opening multies and a decent subject. Nice drop
    Taylor

    Adrenaline peaks when someone relevant speaks....

    www.myspace.com/taylorsmusicuk

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    • #3
      Nice opening multis? It's the same 5 syllable rhyming throughout the entire verse. Thanks. loi
      P!

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      • #4
        thats pretty dope dude, never seen you before but seems like you been around awhile, hope to see stuff like this more often

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        • #5
          No it aint. It changes when it reaches bullshit?...
          Taylor

          Adrenaline peaks when someone relevant speaks....

          www.myspace.com/taylorsmusicuk

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          • #6
            keep my own focus
            people should know this
            evilest cold shit
            needy and hopeless
            legally cope wit'
            we all opponents
            please have a moment
            see where it goes, kid
            be through this whole shit
            feed they own bullshit
            greed and the full clips
            lead me to grow it
            bleed and I show it
            leave like most poets
            legacy to jus' flow wit'

            They don't have to be perfect. It's assonance.

            Peace.
            P!

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            • #7
              I never said they had to be perfect, im just defending my feed mate. I was very impressed with the consistency of the multies up until full clips and bullshit, and then after that it changed back.. so I would class the opening multies as everything that followed the opening multi's scheme. Still a dope as fuck drop so I dunno why were pickin hairs..
              Taylor

              Adrenaline peaks when someone relevant speaks....

              www.myspace.com/taylorsmusicuk

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              • #8
                We're not. We're cool.
                P!

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                • #9
                  simple writing but thats that style, its not just a bunch
                  of words put in to make each line fit, easy to follow on
                  and no doubt you kicked off good, off the hook overall.

                  dope verse bro, stay sharp.
                  R.I.P Proof
                  ......
                  get higher, get higher i never retire
                  there is only two states to be in.. NSW & Stoned

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                  • #10
                    Real talk.
                    P!

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                    • #11
                      the multis and scheme in this are nice as fuck

                      the topics nice, somthin Ive touched a few times...nice rhyme
                      “If you keep coming back that only means you know you lost the fight...
                      But their pride just won’t let em, insides like go get em
                      and I’m just like, why you trying to fight momentum” EMINEM

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                      • #12
                        ^ ur lame




                        pandemic = not lame.
                        LOST
                        THEN I NEVER WANT TO DIE
                        I... I WANT TO LIVE FOREVER










                        8.12.04

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                        • #13
                          Where's all this beef coming from? loi
                          P!

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                          • #14
                            Loi Boredom And Waiting For Lost To Hit 20,000 Posts. Hollllllla
                            LOST
                            THEN I NEVER WANT TO DIE
                            I... I WANT TO LIVE FOREVER










                            8.12.04

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                            • #15
                              The flows good and strict meaning.
                              The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

                              I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

                              With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


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