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    the tide could shift either way in this masquerade//
    as i show my face and walk my own path of faith//
    and passin days, turn to weeks, turn to months//
    turn to rage as im made to stay so compla-cent//
    im anxious to take this passion from anchorage//
    to vegas and back again and in a tragic sense//
    id do it for free, if it meant i got to rap with friends//
    fuck cashin in, i want enough dough to gain a few pounds//
    and enough game to claim a new sound//
    and move towns to the same beat//
    but lately, im pacing up and down mainstreet//
    mufflin screams that nearly escape me every third step//
    cant think of one damn thing that yall aint heard yet//
    except me, basically just lacin a beat about everything adjacent to me//
    and what im cravin to be, im facin my grief//
    one trial at a time and i know i like to speak//
    cause i smile when i rhyme, people filin in line//
    one mile at a time to see the style i provide//
    is a fictional fantasy, wont hang my pride from your pigeonhole canopy//
    it aint gonna damage me, my hides too thick//
    either that or im just too god damn dense//
    so a fence sky high cant stop this wiseguy//
    ill write rhymes so fly i might die if slide right//
    so i stay left behind or front and center//
    and im always on the line during lunch and dinner//
    stuffin faces of the wasted, in the food you can taste it//
    the hate i have for basic life is baked inside the bacon//
    on your burger and the burner is laced with adoration//
    for those who stood before it drippin lakes of perspiration//
    i need a vacation, this wasteland is too gritty//
    sleep a night under ever light in the whole city//
    but dont have pity, i love what ive found//
    a passion for the sound and the mics of the round//
    steady holdin it down like we're goin for the three count//
    got a hold on your town like we're blowin through the weed house//
    so leave doubts and all your hesitation with your egos//
    and we can all go back to bein people//

    walkin down the street now, pullin in the sweet sounds//
    everybodys lookin for a person they can beat down//
    and then sneak out, reroute the escape plan//

    whose that guy with the wandering eyes//
    one of the first three there at the start of a tribe//
    makin and breakin repairs so i can start up my ride//
    people shakin, leave scared, its just part of my life//
    snakes are sittin on my shoulders so im guardin the mic//
    but ill break the brittle backs of every garter in sight//
    if they try pitter pat around my garden tonight//
    plant em six feet deep and start harvesting life//
    everybody wanna know what type of target am i, im the hardest to find//
    makin garbage divine, you'll have an arduous time tryna crawl in my mind//
    so just ball up my rhymes and start fallin in line//
    cant call it a sign if theres no one there to see it//
    cant call it a life if theres no one there to free it//
    cant call her your wife if shes hangin on my penis//
    cant call her tonight, cause shes hangin on my penis//
    genious, didnt you hear me?//
    couldnt be an emcee if i didnt speak clearly//
    takin out the time to make a rhyme to break ya spine is fine//
    cause im inclined to wake ya mind with crazy line desgin//
    that shines divine

    howd ya get here man, who told you you was dope?//
    you'll be buried on your high horse the chief blackbird//

    you got a hell of a view, too bad you cant see well//
    atop that pedestal dude, im makin predator moves//
    its true, slowly creepin in ya blind spot//
    then knock ya knees in, now you seizin to the beats inside ya ipod//
    im not, here to read ya eyes like passwords//
    ill have you buried on that high horse like blackbird//
    so act perterbed and you'll feel the full effect of me//
    walkin around, the talk of the town is actually what im out to be//
    so dont doubt the beat or the steez of ruggednraw//
    pluggin you all with nothin but awe//
    stuffin ya bra cause you fake of the chest//
    takin all the best and try to build a vacant nest//
    where your fate can rest

    time begins to sprint once you clip its wings//
    no matter how deep the cut, no matter how bad it stings//
    itll stay a step ahead of you, settin the traps//
    while ya pride lags behind, just collecting the scraps//

    sometimes you wanna skip ahead, sometimes you wanna double back//
    if you dwell too long, you'll find ya foot inside another trap//
    other cats, might get stuck in a rut for life//
    and when that hunter comes along, get bucked in gut with knives//
    cause his hide is worth much more than his substance//
    sound familiar?, cradle cats this is where ya luck ends//
    ya tucked in, dreamin of bitches and big things//
    carvin up the scene, flippin switches and bling bling//
    but the thing is, you dont know what a dream is//
    some people work for life and they never achieve it//

    steadily, we instill bad thoughts like jury duty//
    you can barely move me like you forgot to say excuse me//

    slicin through peasants with their torches and pitchforks//
    they'll never catch up cause their horses are piss poor//
    shakin the ground causin fissures and faultlines//
    break through ya town, eat ya liver with small fries//
    wipe the blood off battle axe, no this aint a battle rap//
    we blazing so much the sheriff wants his saddle back//
    but this cat'll smack, any individual into minuscule fragments//
    ya innerpool stagnant after i pass it by//
    askin why i can rhyme is//
    silly, like double time rhyming over primus//
    the finest, grimiest fucker wearin fur//
    that you ever saw, no dogs like a severed paw//
    never fall, like im stuck in july//
    im always raw dawg when im fuckin ya wife//
    and the village idiot is feelin it, he stopped by//
    saw me in her thighs, i got a rise like knee high//
    socks, you can see i rock, like ya standin in iran//
    killin off dimebags, damaging ya plans//
    your brandishing a lamp, to enlighten ya campground//
    destroy ya colony, put dynamite in ya ant mound//
    Last edited by grassnasty; 06-13-2008, 11:49 AM.
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  • #2
    Was it the length that kept most at bay? lol...okay, i'll take a stab at it. Honestly, it started off great. Flowed right off the tongue. As you move on some lines and rhymes seemed a little forced...

    Eg.

    "except me, basically just lacin a beat about everything adjacent to me//"


    But then you get right back into a decent flow. Overall, fairly good.

    -Mik

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    • #3
      thanks homie...its not all combined in my book like it is in the post...they are separated...so its not one big long song if thats what people were thinking..thanks for the feedback homez appreciate it
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      • #4
        after readin that this wasnt just one long verse, I re-read everything. Its still kinda hard to differentiate where one flow stops and the other starts. like dragoneyes said, this started off really nice man. but the format is whats keepin you from getting too much feedback. keep the flows comin man, these are nice. just next time space em out.
        “If you keep coming back that only means you know you lost the fight...
        But their pride just won’t let em, insides like go get em
        and I’m just like, why you trying to fight momentum” EMINEM

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        • #5
          ill just do it right now...theres a couple lines that are just random...one sec

          *fixed

          thank you for reading
          Last edited by grassnasty; 06-13-2008, 11:49 AM.
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