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  • Give You My Whole Life

    You Guessed It...

    It's a looooooove song haha.

    Listen...

    It's beyond commitment, we are fused together
    I could never do better, refuse to let this sever
    You know more about me than me, and it scares me
    You found me broke down and repaired me
    Then teared me apart, torn heart, but it healed
    Now we stronger than ever, know exactly how I feel
    I'm sorry this seems strayed, words won't flow
    We put seeds in a desert thinkin' flowers would grow
    It may have took a few months, but the pedals appeared
    And a few weeks later fell to the gardeners shear
    But stems re-grow strong, spring brings blossoms
    Need'a add a little fertilizer, then sit back and watch'em
    You the best thing ta happen to me
    I can see it in your eyes when you laughin silly
    Been told to back off, been told it's all wrong
    All I know is I feel we've been right all along

    [Hook]
    Cuz with me...I see you, girl
    You got the best of me..
    We love...and we fight
    Girl, I give you my whole life

    mmm...work brings the words outta me haha
    Download my new mixtape "Public Axis Vol. 1" http://www.sendspace.com/file/7527jn
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  • #2
    well, not your best

    flow is a little choppy reading it, depending on how you spit it, it could work

    IMO, needs a little more work.
    “If you keep coming back that only means you know you lost the fight...
    But their pride just won’t let em, insides like go get em
    and I’m just like, why you trying to fight momentum” EMINEM

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    • #3
      Propz on reading.

      Yea, I said fuck vocab and just started typin' the tale. I don't know, I'm to the point of not caring any more. To where I'ma just gonna write it, record it...and fuck it, if you don't like it...you don't like it. No more writing to a crowd, or writing to the radio, or writing to impress. If it happens to impress you, sweet.

      This music producer (works for Disney currently) was telling me the one thing, and most important thing is that you enjoy it. He said, yea you're trying to get fans, and make your $$ here and there, but in the end, it will always sound better if you just write for yourself.

      W00t.

      Don't know why I felt it necessary to explain all that. I guess I'm saying, yea it could lyrically use work, but fuck it. haha.
      Download my new mixtape "Public Axis Vol. 1" http://www.sendspace.com/file/7527jn
      New Beats: www.soundclick.com/axisproductions
      Mixing/Mastering available! PM for details.

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      • #4
        We put seeds in a desert thinkin' flowers would grow

        You found me broke down and repaired me

        The whole flower metaphor section was way cool, It's average I guess. I'm not really feelin' the hook. Not bad, not outstanding. A, C grade piece.
        The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

        I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

        With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


        Got It?

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        • #5
          Axis

          I feel ya man, thats why all the topics I write about, for the most part, either offend people or people feel the shit. I write what I think not givin a fuck what others feel about it. Just part of who I am. When the crowd feels the shit its always nice, but when they dont Im like you are.....fuck it. Keep em comin.

          Post Script - Ayo that Suddenly Silent shit is tight. Nice drop on that one.
          Last edited by Lyrakil; 06-25-2008, 10:52 AM.
          “If you keep coming back that only means you know you lost the fight...
          But their pride just won’t let em, insides like go get em
          and I’m just like, why you trying to fight momentum” EMINEM

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          • #6
            Thanks dude. =]
            Download my new mixtape "Public Axis Vol. 1" http://www.sendspace.com/file/7527jn
            New Beats: www.soundclick.com/axisproductions
            Mixing/Mastering available! PM for details.

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            • #7
              thanks for readin' Rick
              Download my new mixtape "Public Axis Vol. 1" http://www.sendspace.com/file/7527jn
              New Beats: www.soundclick.com/axisproductions
              Mixing/Mastering available! PM for details.

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              • #8
                I really like it. The words are touching. I guess it's what you say instead of how you say it in this case. Good shit.
                P!

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