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    I got a swag defined as a mastermind of the highest class refined
    Able to take my past designs, sit back and recline to do it better
    And watch the haters crash behind....the trail of smoke I've left
    And for those who choked to death weren't built to approach the vet
    If you aint notice yet, I've been on my grind and haven't lost focus yet
    Had an atrocious wreck, but didn't die when the diagnosis read
    I had to have open heart surgery for me to be able to postpone my death
    I was back on my two feet with a new beat once they closed my chest
    I've driven over the potholes, damn near escaped every obstacle
    Turned what was impossible possible because losing isn't optional
    Time heals everything is a box of bull, certain pain just isn't stoppable
    I know I should've died in that hospital, but God had a different plan
    He offered me another chance at life and so I grabbed the bid and ran
    With the thought in my mind that I can still die at any minute man
    When more troubles comes ashore I won't be out there diggin' sand
    No ditch for me, that's history, no more misery, I'm livin' grand!
    Standing tall like a lightpost, never will my eyes close, I'm immortal
    If anything goes wrong I'm stepping into that portal to travel back
    Where I first lost myself trying to paddle back to shore for recovery
    But now that fear of fate is 6 ft. under me, no longer will it cover me
    Like a black cloud, cause this is another me just in case you wondering
    I have risen from the shadows of the other me to be seen as best
    But that's another story, Alex never left, you cats were dreaming it
    Aye is still in this town cause the fat lady aint finished her singing yet
    Give me breath....




    http://illesty.net/board/showthread.php?t=10307



    http://illesty.net/board/showthread.php?t=10423


    I'm Back....
    Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

  • #2
    Upping This.
    Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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    • #3
      For those who choked to death werent built to approach a vet... Very nice

      "I had to have open heart surgery for me to be able to postpone my death
      I was back on my two feet with a new beat once they closed my chest" Fuckin nice as well

      "Turned what was impossible possible because losing isn't optional
      Time heals everything is a box of bull, certain pain just isn't stoppable" If I carry on quoting my fave pieces I may as well have quoted the whole verse....

      "Standing tall like a lightpost, never will my eyes close, I'm immortal
      If anything goes wrong I'm stepping into that portal to travel back" Aint sure how you spit it but it felt the flawless flow fell off a bit here.

      Overall man its fuckin nice to hav u back this was well nice. Easily, easily one of your best. Cant fault this, especially the first 10 odd lines, loved it.

      Thanks for the feed on Crazy Flow
      Taylor

      Adrenaline peaks when someone relevant speaks....

      www.myspace.com/taylorsmusicuk

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      • #4
        Thanks Tay. And In That Last Part You Quoted, The Flow Is There, It's Just Carried Onto The Next Line With The Rhyme.
        Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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        • #5
          ayo Vision man, this is a very nice piece. there are moments where the rhyme scheme itself is slightly sacrificed to make the depth of the story hold weight but man, thats not a bad thing. I appreciate the way you write man. I dont mean the scheme is actually sacrificed, Im sayin you extend it further into the piece to make the point. Madd creative. Flow is even throughout the rhyme. Very nice piece man
          “If you keep coming back that only means you know you lost the fight...
          But their pride just won’t let em, insides like go get em
          and I’m just like, why you trying to fight momentum” EMINEM

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          • #6
            Thanks Man.
            Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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            • #7
              Yeah I'm Upping This.
              Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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              • #8
                You get slept on mass I check this out at work if I get a chance.
                The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

                I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

                With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


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                • #9
                  Alright Good Looks.
                  Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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                  • #10
                    And for those who choked to death weren't built to approach the vet
                    If you aint notice yet, I've been on my grind and haven't lost focus yet


                    ^ like that.
                    \

                    THe bar are a bit streched, and some of the internal rhyming is a bit over used. It's pretty good but for the amount of text you typed up I think it really fell short.
                    The Silver Tounge Troublemaker

                    I'm Kobe Bryant Ready

                    With This Ego I Can Stand Here In A Speedo And Get Looked At Like A Fuckin' Hero.


                    Got It?

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