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  • Some shit I came up with while in the shower.....

    I was thinkin to hard in the shower today (or maybe not hard enough....y'all can be da judge) an this is what I came up with......check it out and lemme know whatcha think! Thanx!

    In a state of anesthesia
    yet not quite euthanized
    lethal frustration
    morbid fascination
    with life's indignation
    and mental castration
    see my reflection in your eyes
    do you fear what you see in mine?
    need to feed
    my abasing needs
    lust and greed
    the evil we breed
    gets the best of me

    In a state of anethesia
    wanting to be euthanized
    state of abdication
    computer animation
    useless infatuation
    exhoneration
    passive inundation
    see my reflection in your eyes
    do you fear what you see in mine?
    who will feed
    my abasing needs
    an let me bleed
    on this world of greed
    before it gets the best of me

    In a state of anethesia
    ready to be euthanized
    world-wide desecration
    propeganda's copulation
    mass-media fornication
    world-wide ejaculation
    see my reflection in your eyes
    Do you fear what I feel inside?
    like a rabid whore
    aches to fill her need
    done the dirty deed
    planting demon seeds
    I'm a floating entity
    in a state of recuperation
    evil temptation
    bi-polar titillation
    who will end this misery
    before it gets the best of me?

    Peace!

  • #2
    Nice stuff girl. I liked the flow, especially the repeated bars.
    Its similar to a lot of verse that i write, i like to mess round with
    3-4 word bars too.Good vocab and structure.Overall niceness.

    Keep posting.

    PEACE
    The only thing worse than the wretched pain in my mouth is the excrement spewing from yours-Stewie Griffen

    ONLY GOD CAN JUDGE ME

    R.I.P ~ Tupac Shakur-my biggest musical inspiration…you are missed everyday

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    • #3
      yah, that was real ill. go peep Extreme Contact(for those who know...), Lost In Love, and mah battle with 12HAZYD and vote on that, girl. i was realli diggin' ur verse. good vocabulary and nice metaphors. peace tha hekk out.
      Lyrikally Lost aka Fidel Kastrator


      http://invince.8m.net/dei2.gif

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      • #4
        hey shit was tight pimp ass stuff. post more around u'll get mad respect. http://www.dirty12.com/cgi-bin/ikonb...um=7&topic=394 <---- need votez plz this thing has been going on forever
        defeated list

        dexta- double xl- phizzle- hollow pointz- illest- razael- lyrikally lost- xtacy- sikotic- jady- underworld- peel junkee- purplehaze2701- dj scidazals- ray thunder- catastrophe-millzma$ta- drakk-I.e-freestyla122
        http://www.geocities.com/fusion1121/du7.gif herbs die slow

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        • #5
          damn.....

          that was some nice shit, tight as fuck, keep it up, peace
          Point Of No Return Ill Wayz And Dmote Ranks

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          • #6
            WOW!

            AAWWW....You guyz sure know how to put a smile on a woman's face!!! Thanx!!! I was sure no one would like it; now y'all give me inspiration to work on this more! Too bad I don't get online much anymore......I'll hafta try to change that!(3rd shift aint so kind to me ) Anywayz, thanx! I've been checkin posts in here, and I like most of what I see. Y'all pretty tight, and Ican see I've got my competition cut out for me! I'll post some more shit in a couple days, but for now I gotta go get some sleep before work! Keep it real, guyz!
            Peace!
            P.S. R.I.P. AAliyah........You are missed!
            P.P.S. I'm puttin this down in the d-12 battle section!
            Last edited by JaninEM; 08-26-2001, 03:03 PM.

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            • #7
              tight
              playformore.org , One Year Millionaire Blog

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              • #8
                needs work no disrespect i only diss guys
                Girls leave your naked pics and phone numbers in my PM box...

                Guys don't hate me because I'm everything you want to be...

                Let me school you... - Royce the 5'9" and me

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                • #9
                  I liked it
                  "It's Bugz, Bitch, who the fuck you thunk it was?" Bugz RIP

                  "I search for bitch hitchhikers, pick em up, put a wack tape in if they bob their heads, strip em naked and rape em"- Copywrite

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                  • #10
                    Re: Some shit I came up with while in the shower.....

                    [QUOTE]Originally posted by JaninEM
                    I was thinkin to hard in the shower today (or maybe not hard enough....y'all can be da judge) an this is what I came up with......check it out and lemme know whatcha think! Thanx!

                    In a state of anesthesia
                    yet not quite euthanized
                    lethal frustration
                    morbid fascination
                    with life's indignation
                    and mental castration
                    see my reflection in your eyes
                    do you fear what you see in mine?
                    need to feed
                    my abasing needs
                    lust and greed
                    the evil we breed
                    gets the best of me

                    In a state of anethesia
                    wanting to be euthanized
                    state of abdication
                    computer animation
                    useless infatuation
                    exhoneration
                    passive inundation
                    see my reflection in your eyes
                    do you fear what you see in mine?
                    who will feed
                    my abasing needs
                    an let me bleed
                    on this world of greed
                    before it gets the best of me

                    In a state of anethesia
                    ready to be euthanized
                    world-wide desecration
                    propeganda's copulation
                    mass-media fornication
                    world-wide ejaculation
                    see my reflection in your eyes
                    Do you fear what I feel inside?
                    like a rabid whore
                    aches to fill her need
                    done the dirty deed
                    planting demon seeds
                    I'm a floating entity
                    in a state of recuperation
                    evil temptation
                    bi-polar titillation
                    who will end this misery
                    before it gets the best of me?

                    Peace!
                    [/QUOTE

                    Nice. I liked the ending to each of the verses. keep up the work 'n' keep posting.
                    :D

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