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  • Just Something I Came Up With.

    I'm a young businiess man,
    Green in my eye seachin' for grands,
    Plottin up plans, tryin' ta get ahead,
    Used ta be a dopehead, but I a shed,
    The past leave it behind, a mastermind,
    On the grind, fixin ta shine in time,
    Lay low behind & learn from mistakes,
    Others make, intake use it to my advantage,
    Leave competitors at a disadvantage,
    When I push forward will they manage?
    Doin' my homework buried in books,
    Often over looked, you'll be shook,
    And shocked, when I pop,
    Always afloat mind travelin' fuck a dock,
    Fulla schemes, I'm a rein supreme,
    Sellin' before sold takin' my shit mainstream.



    Ending Comments: Holler at a player let me know what ya'll think about the verse.


    Cheers,
    Ridiculous
    Last edited by Ridiculous_Rick; 02-18-2004, 12:37 PM.
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  • #2
    Wow, someone sure hit the snooze botton. Obviously my shit didn't suck to bad or I would have got some negative feedback. But anyway can someone just drop me a line of critisism? It'd mwan a lot.

    Uppin,
    Ridiculous.
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    • #3
      Nice rhyming but...
      Work on your content...
      Lines are way too short, add content/ intellect to your pieces..
      Dont just write shit to rhyme, write shit that makes sense as a whole...
      Fuck the beat, I go acapella.

      Synical (adj.)-Cyn·i·cal - Expressing jaded or scornful skepticism or negativity.

      "You wacker than the motherfucker you bit your style from
      you aint gonna sell two copies if you press a double album
      " -EMINEM

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      • #4
        That shit does make sense. It's talkin' about how I'm a young up-comin' enturpenuer and how I'm takin' my shit mainstream for everyone to see. But thanks for the feedback it's about time someone responded to my shit. I get what your sayin' though about expanding my lines a bit more. Just my style I guess. Thanks for the feedback.


        Cheers,
        Ridiculous
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        • #5
          one of the better texts ive seen on the board, although you do need to make your bars longer, well you dont NEED TO, but it would sound better, i duno i only do audios now, keep elavatin tho

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          • #6
            Hey thanks man it means a lot to get some feedback, I've been dwellin' for a minute havn't really been doin shit. So it's good to know my shit ain't half bad. Thanks man good lookin'.


            Cheers,
            Ridiculous
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            • #7
              Uppin' for some feedback.
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              • #8
                you need to make lines longers cause if you ever recorded that it would be a wack flow
                rhymes were alright better than ur previous shit
                Last edited by cz81725; 02-20-2004, 01:01 PM.
                http://www.youtube.com/v/03fo6CQpiAw
                The G-MEN
                BEST IN THE NFC

                7-6.... vs Philly
                WE BAAAAAAAAALLLLLLIN!

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                • #9
                  Uh, I guess thanks for the feedback even though you dissed me but gave me some cred. Also you ain't never one won me in no battle, I don't even remember battling you so set a thread and i'll batlle you for real.



                  Ridiculous
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                  • #10
                    THIS WAS THE BATTLE, you said "suck my dick" so i dissed u wit this

                    "ridiculous ricks, shit wasnt sick
                    tellin me to suck you, fuck you sit on a dick
                    cause your rhymes are dead fake
                    when mine are so sick anyone listening gets a head ache
                    so buy asprin, nyquil and tylenol try em all
                    and if u take to much your just gonna die and fall
                    and you got no money please dont try and ball
                    and you got no people so please dont try and call
                    your three or probably four little homies you got
                    if i catch you alone dont be shocked if the chrome leaves you shot
                    and your dome leaks alot so dont roam streets alot
                    cause your gonna see this chrome piece will knock
                    your your head off your rest
                    of your your body and leave you dead and a mess
                    i said im the best and right now i aint even using punchlines
                    so suck your dick nah bitch suck mines
                    if you say something again wit your dumb rhymes
                    ima cut your ass like your in school on the lunchline"

                    THEN YOU DISSEd ME BAcK WITH

                    "Blah, blah, blah it's all been said before,
                    Ridin' Ja's dick like ICP and Ken on Em's record beggin' "more, more, more."
                    The only guns you toatin' is little cap guns,
                    Thinkin' you wild son, I saw you prayin with nuns,
                    Come and fuck with the best,
                    I'll put you down like I used to when I threw rocks at birds nest,
                    You from Canada yo that must explain this,
                    You can't drop bombs so yo you dismissed,
                    Your foolish typical raps I'll never bring me pleasure,
                    Your shits fools gold faggot it's far from treaure.



                    Explanation: That droppin bombs shit I saids just a play off how Canada has no military power. Heh.

                    BTW this took me 2 mintues so fuck you if you think it's wack."
                    http://www.youtube.com/v/03fo6CQpiAw
                    The G-MEN
                    BEST IN THE NFC

                    7-6.... vs Philly
                    WE BAAAAAAAAALLLLLLIN!

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                    • #11
                      THEN I DISSED YOU AGAIN

                      "damn ridiculous rick is back again
                      wack again go outside for once i can tell you lack a friend
                      i spit facts again stop rhymin cause i know u finished
                      your rhyme was trash i can tell u wrote it in 2 minutes
                      im doin it with greatness dissin me thats stupid
                      your from utah then stop rhymin and try jazz music
                      i pack 2 clips, that do rip
                      through your skin and bones and dont think thats to thick
                      rap music isnt your talent give it up
                      your shit isnt tough so get offline get a life and live it up
                      my rhymes are sick as fuck
                      my bars have you losing breathe your always hickin up
                      i can tell your scared
                      you dont want your house lookin like a beach the way the shells are there
                      now i gotta damage a
                      fake bitch who name is slim miami when hes from canada
                      that just really doesnt make sense
                      like going to a camp not knowing how to make tents
                      and your girl your mom and your sister i already dated
                      im not even tryin as i already stated"

                      THE U DISSED ME BACK

                      "Stop with the fabracations, I can tell this is one big hoe nation,
                      I'm losin' my patience, ya'll rap like you some big stuff,
                      But ya'll just blinded takin' a bite outta ya bitches like McGruff,
                      I'm a broke joke with no deal, ya'll say you real,
                      You got lies spinnin' rapid like the fortune wheel,
                      With no cash, I ain't gotta say I mash, in escaldes,
                      How you gonna say you roll the shit and you paid,
                      When you can't even spell the ride right,
                      You just might think about headin' back to school,
                      Cause you sound like a tool, with nuttin but the usual,
                      Bullshit. Ain't no body feelin' you but yourself,
                      This only the internet but on the street you large ego could be a threat to you health,
                      I smell shit but I sure didn't delt it, I know anyone who peeps these posts would say they far from felt it,
                      And cz got a picture of homer in his avatar,
                      With a small peanut brain another dead head pot smoker losin his brain cells your loss is my gain,
                      Watch a true emcee florish as I elevate higher then any of you this is my game."

                      AND I WHOOPED UR ASS

                      THE END
                      http://www.youtube.com/v/03fo6CQpiAw
                      The G-MEN
                      BEST IN THE NFC

                      7-6.... vs Philly
                      WE BAAAAAAAAALLLLLLIN!

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                      • #12
                        the short lines ain't a problem, how they would be spit is what makes 'em sound good
                        in my eyes the problem is just theres no intellect, simple rhymes, small vocab.
                        u said u makin ur shit mainstream, fuck that. keep ur shit real
                        if u make it in the rap game don't sell out to some bullshit
                        to sell records. Keep it real, u'll be more popular to true hip hop heads.
                        an audience of cheesy people that only listen to shit the industry
                        feeds them through the radio sells, but a lot of it is bogus and takes
                        the soul out of rhymin
                        I LOVE MY *BabyTigger*



                        - Tigg
                        aka: NewPorT

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                        • #13
                          but i still won
                          http://www.youtube.com/v/03fo6CQpiAw
                          The G-MEN
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                          7-6.... vs Philly
                          WE BAAAAAAAAALLLLLLIN!

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                          • #14
                            I didn't know we were battlin'. I was just fuckin' around. But whatever's clever man battling's not my thing. Thanks for the feedback Newport I'm not sellin' out man but my minds set on money to tell you the truth. So I just came out with a verse to let everyone know that shit when ever I record that shit. It's not like I'm ever gonna get signed anyway this is just some shit I do to release my creative juices. But anyway thanks for the feedback man.


                            Uppin',
                            Ridiculous
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