Random Freestyle

[dErTy kEvin]

ill come behind you and put you in one of them headlocks
take my fucking hand and pull out all of your dreadlocks
my teachers seem like there always tryin to fail me, its like their mission
but i dont give a fuck, so here, ill help start the ignition
yo im tired of living on these fuckin streets
lookin for some dudes around here that have some real fuckin beats
cuz im tired goin acapella with these fuckin flows
and im tired of every one of my friends becoming fucking foes
well enough with the fuckin complanin
i dare you to take you gun out, and start aimin
cuz right when you get your gun pointed right on my FOREhead
my boyz will have you surrounded, and next thing you know, YOUR dead


Ok I know, it sucks, it was just somethin i wrote down in like 2 minutes toward the end of class. most of it dont really go together, but at least it all ryhmes(i think)
post feedback plz!

[NewPorT]

u need to work on ur rhymin.
u got 2 lines rhymin and thats it, try to get
as many lines to rhyme as u can with them still makin sense
and make them more complex. This will make ur shit
a lot better