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  • A Ryme

    Im like a bank teller,
    as acient as old yeller
    ive been around forever,
    n will work thru good n bad weather
    when u give me your information that starts the invasion ,
    gives me the reason to start teasen,pleasen the crowd
    tis the season to make u belive in the thangs that I rip n spit out loud ,
    when they surround this unda ground rap hit
    ,ill spit it back out decline your shit
    in a state of ryme in lil amount of time , n make sure my spits are one of a kind,

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    the thing I don;'t like about this the most,
    is how u go "I'm like a bank teller" but then
    don't explain how. then, where u say "teason,
    pleasen the crowd" when u tease, u don't
    please at the same time. then in " n make sure my spits are one of a kind,"
    it sounds kinda, off perhaps if it said " n assuure my lines are one of a kind"
    just not too good with it yet, keep workin
    build up ur vocab and work on ur material
    u got the potential to do well, u just need
    some work.
    I LOVE MY *BabyTigger*



    - Tigg
    aka: NewPorT

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