some other shit i just wrote now

[katey shadey]

this is for all the happy people//
that have real nice lives//
and dont know how it feels to be so loney//
to slit yours rists only//
to feel the pain or watch it bleed//
being the best actress in town and never get lead//
dress in all black and let your pants sag//
spike your hair or die it red or black//
never ever bein alowd to fight back//
be the only white person in town//
every time you go to school you always feel so down//
so listen to the sound of my voice//
you have a choice//
to live how you wanna live//
and say what you wanna say//
even if someone tell you not to/
your the only one who gets to choose//
you can be your best and stand out//
or be like all the rest and dissapear in the crowd//
i did use the first 2 lines from slim shady get over it

[katey shadey]

i know it sucks but you could tell me

[Gray Ghost]

iam feeling you nice ...keep it up

[InK]

yeah, it was alright, you are gettin better, just try to keep your shit original. Keep practicing on your wordplay, multies, and try to have at least two words in the same line that rhyme. Overall it was good, can't say as i was feelin it, because i'm not white and i grew up around some different shit, but yeah, i'm sure other people would feel it, anyway, nice work, keep it up.