Read This Yall Holla Back.

[C.V.D]

Yo this is me yall...

Bitches im COMIN VICIOUS and wit DANGER,
U wanna know the real manin of C.V.D well im not ur savour,
Im doin u a favour wit this,
And if u scared to fuck ur be usin a tube to piss,
Up in a here im the odd one like drumand,
Yall are all black so u can see me when i be comin,
This is me im alot better than 50 cent,
When im buyin a mansion yall are all missin rent,
I fuck hoes morning nite and noon,
So i dont need a girl like usher 'P' and loon,
Im known as the keeper so call me crimson,
If not ill chock ya till ya skin looks like the simpsons,
Fuck money when i want a car ill be bribing ford,
Hav the fools on the edge like they were standing on a diving board,
Talk shit then u wont be able to see to well,
Yall on T4 when we and my crews on TRL,
I lov my girl coz shes a bit nite,
But she like cinderella coz she fucks of at midnite,

yall wot ya think feedback please peeps.
ina bit yall.
peace!

[Fitz]

eh it flowed good but ya needa elevate ur lyrics and shit, keep workin

[C.V.D]

cheers man wot u think i reall need to work on spicificaully.
holla bk man.
peace!

[Fitz]

well i thought the multis were alright and the creativity was ok for a beginner, i thought that it was very good for a beginner. You got some good little things here and there, but the rhyme schemes were a little simple and so were the creativity.....expand ur vocab is what im sayin, use really tough words, dont be afraid to play around with words u know? thats the fun part, just throwin random words together and shit, keep workin tho man, only can go up from here

[geetheripper]

yea, alright for a beginner, u got potential...
Your flow style seemed alright, but I couldn't really tell ya unless I heard ya,
I agree wit fitz, more wordplay, think outside the box...
I like how u used synonyms though good job with that,
You can only get better from here