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    The Funeral

    The decripite are lugging along umbrellas.
    Children with gaping mouths are catching e--lusi--ve raindrops,
    And i? I'm feeling d o l o u r - so black.

    This thunder is absorbed in my jacket,
    This ruby ring converses with the LiGhTeNiNg,
    And i look at life and just wonder...
    If like is a nightmare, is Heaven just a dream?
    I SCREAM-

    This valediction swarms my breath.
    I lament.
    Then drown my sorrows at Sandbanks.

    I'm no obsticle, straight over me
    Elephants crush my ribs,
    Continuing to knead the sand grains-
    A pathway to a deserted destiny.

    The contrast of a blossoming garden on black clothing,
    Two extremities - diametric - darn effective.
    You people are borrowing the elderly's faces,
    All hunched over with bi-symmetric bell's palsy.
    So much grief, so much relief - welcome the rain!
    Pour!!

    Ravens perched on black fenced,
    Observing the emptiness of prayer.
    Erected hands endearing to the sun,
    And whispering to the sky.
    Who cares? It only enrages the clouds.
    Now there's a storm.
    What hope? Who's hope lives in this cemetery?
    Hi old school d12world!!

  • #2
    wow so u wrote this? its very well written and sad

    one line i liked alot was 'If like is a nightmare, is Heaven just a dream?
    I SCREAM-'

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    • #3
      uh yea big words. good job-discriptive very.

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      • #4
        Thank you.... it's quite a personal poem... a friend died of cancer, she had breast cancer but later developed liver cancer.. it's about her funeral. ... you probably won't understand half of it, because it's got a hidden meaning.

        Thank you so much for the feedback.
        Hi old school d12world!!

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        • #5
          Wow, when I read the lyrics to your songs some hella time ago, I knew you would be the greatest with poetry.. Dunno if you wrote this in the spirit of when I asked you if you ever wrote a poem, but you can be proud of yourself.. It also gives me the energy to write again, since non of my poems can top this lmao
          *** J B K o n l i n e D O T com ***

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          • #6
            beautiful Els.

            Im sorry to hear of your loss.
            "Say what you will about the sweet miracle of unquestioning faith, I consider a capacity for it terrifying and absolutely vile."
            - Kurt Vonnegut

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            • #7
              i got cancer.. i just hope God will clear it off.

              ps.nice poem..

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              • #8
                Thank you, i really appreciate your comments.

                Awww Tr|, i am so sorry to hear that. I will pray for you. x
                Hi old school d12world!!

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                • #9
                  This lines go very deep Ellie. Its really well written. U are very talented! Keep it up!

                  @Trlphat Im sorry to hear this! I wish u good luck for everything!
                  FREEDOM IS JUST ANOTHER WORD FOR NOTHING LEFT TO LOSE !
                  Janis Joplin

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