HIP HOP LIFESTYLE

Announcement

Collapse
No announcement yet.

Loner

Collapse
X
 
  • Filter
  • Time
  • Show
Clear All
new posts

  • Loner

    I find beauty in loneliness.
    Solice in solitude.
    Alone in my room, as I brood,
    Iím in a good mood.
    My anger subdued.
    Antisocial attitude?
    Iím not an outcast; society I exclude!
    Donít give a fuck how Iím viewed.
    How my life is construed as completely screwed.
    This triviality I elude.
    My feelings protrude.
    To these poems they are glued.
    In a manner that is shrewd,
    To my heart, I allude.
    This tone that I use,
    Is reminiscent of the blues.
    I say whatever I choose.
    Freedom of speech Iíll abuse.
    Teenage angst thatís profuse!
    Some may think Iím just confused.
    That these thoughts I produce, are too damn obtuse.
    But I just say ĎFUCK YOU!í
    You accuse to bemuse.
    Youíll never break me,
    I refuse to defuse!

    just something i wrote a few minutes ago out of boredom... i was more focused on using a cool rhyme scheme than trying to write something thats actually original or meaningful. feedback would be appreciated.
    What I'm Listening To

  • #2
    whoaha! thats one wikid piece, i havent read piece like that b4 where the rhyme was creating a crescendo, that was literally exhilerating(<sorry dumb/cheezy word). awesome topic, definately with ya.

    awesome stuff. thnx

    Comment


    • #3
      thanks, i really appreciate the feedback. glad you liked it!
      What I'm Listening To

      Comment


      • #4
        anyone else got some feedback?
        What I'm Listening To

        Comment


        • #5
          That was wicked! My favourite line was,

          "Antisocial attitude?
          Iím not an outcast; society I exclude!"

          Comment


          • #6
            yeah man...
            Hell Yeah I'm South African...bring on the hate!

            Comment


            • #7
              "I'm not and outcast; society I exclude"......also my favorite line........very, very original.....I give it .. .......
              YoU Can'T HurT wHat'S No lONger ThERe.... wITh nO heArT...I dOn't FUCKEN CARE

              Comment


              • #8
                ^^~what t. toones says.....that was my fav. too......seems like you got a few fans, and it's well deserved! Keep up the good work.
                Life is what you make it.

                Comment


                • #9
                  repped... awesome poem
                  ++++++++++++
                  _________________

                  Comment

                  Post ad widget 300x250

                  Collapse

                  LATEST POSTS

                  Collapse

                  Topics Statistics Last Post
                  Started by Deborahlanker, 06-03-2021, 08:33 PM
                  6 responses
                  29 views
                  0 likes
                  Last Post Glenedelstein  
                  Started by Omaha17, 11-11-2007, 08:02 PM
                  1 response
                  21 views
                  0 likes
                  Last Post jesi
                  by jesi
                   
                  Started by Deborahlanker, Today, 09:34 AM
                  0 responses
                  2 views
                  0 likes
                  Last Post Deborahlanker  
                  Started by Deborahlanker, Today, 09:19 AM
                  0 responses
                  2 views
                  0 likes
                  Last Post Deborahlanker  
                  Started by ceracareavis, Today, 08:47 AM
                  0 responses
                  2 views
                  0 likes
                  Last Post ceracareavis  
                  Started by ceracareavis, Today, 08:46 AM
                  0 responses
                  2 views
                  0 likes
                  Last Post ceracareavis  
                  Started by nmgfefcss, Today, 02:17 AM
                  0 responses
                  2 views
                  0 likes
                  Last Post nmgfefcss  
                  Started by Nancystarkman, Today, 01:04 AM
                  0 responses
                  2 views
                  0 likes
                  Last Post Nancystarkman  
                  Started by defflyshene, Today, 12:06 AM
                  0 responses
                  2 views
                  0 likes
                  Last Post defflyshene  
                  Started by Deborahlanker, 05-24-2021, 08:47 AM
                  6 responses
                  35 views
                  0 likes
                  Last Post marcumharrison1  
                  Working...
                  X