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    this is kind of a spoken word piece , so i capitalized all the parts i would emphasize if i were to be reciting it outloud (i was watching def poetry jam before i wrote it.) on paper it doesnt sound as good as it would outloud, cause i sort of add the structure and make it flow with my voice, but i guess you can still get the basic idea by reading it. big thanks to LoneLioness for giving me the idea to write this. it really reflects how different of a person i am when im in a better mood, if you compare it to the other poems i posted here. its kinda short cause i wrote it so quickly, but oh well... please leave feedback, since this is the first time im writing something like this. well here it is:

    As the pen hits the paper I become IMMORTAL
    Misguided thoughts of mine will be FOREVER recorded

    You see, my poetry is like a TIME MACHINE
    Allowing me or ANYBODY
    To travel back through years of STRUGGLING

    To find MYSELF
    And inspect my CURRENT perspective
    At ANY given point in TIME

    REGARDLESS of how Iíve evolved as a HUMAN BEING
    My words will ALWAYS be there
    PERMANENTLY, remaining the same

    Those who arenít even aware of my mere EXISTENCE
    Have INSTANT ACCESS

    To my innermost THOUGHTS
    Feelings, fears, EMOTIONS
    Insecurities, individuality, SOUL

    EVERY FUCKING THING THAT MAKES ME WHO I AM

    JAWAD MUHAMMAD HUSAIN

    Angry youth, nerd, misunderstood genius
    But most importantly

    POET

    This is what makes ME

    This is who I AM

    This is how I choose to express MYSELF

    But what you make of this
    Is entirely up to YOU
    Last edited by IslamicMarksman; 03-20-2005, 03:31 PM.
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    hey yeh, thats kool...clever stuff Jawad.

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    • #3
      i really like this, beautiful job.

      this is your first time? hope it's not your last, i'd like to read more of your stuff


      def poetry jam is amazing<3

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      • #4
        Originally posted by ___emo*star___
        i really like this, beautiful job.

        this is your first time? hope it's not your last, i'd like to read more of your stuff


        def poetry jam is amazing<3
        im glad you liked it. well this is my first time writing a spoken word piece, and it's very different from my typical poetry. usually i always try to rhyme, but this time i was just like "screw that, im gonna say whatever i want." and my tone is usually a lot more angry or depressed. this is probably the first time im actually writing something that is kind of positive. if you wanna read more of my stuff just scroll down a little bit on the poetry forum page, i have two other ones i posted, "the insignificance of my existence" and "loner".
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