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    March 24




    in your plams my head rests flash backs of lifes tests bags of ses ripping my mothers heart from her chest

    I can't take back the foot prints I sink in the scars on my skin or where I've been

    from holden my head up and sticken my neck out to folden clips up blowen decks out sometime I just wanna blow my brains out

    but I owe more then my life I havn't enough lost with out my pennys death is tuff

    I have nothing for me to sell to the soul toll keeper in his in a shadow lost of mr ripper in a death hold sleeper my arms become weaker

    in the fast line with sin every thing washes in I"m drowing in my choices to many mind too many voices

    never silence I must repent but my anger only allows me to vent the sand in the tower has went and I can't flip the hour glass time just moves to fast

    from early dawn till night I see what haunts me now the choice belongs to me and I know how but you see I sliped I'm only falling now

    stuck between here and there with out a where lost in limbo from tossed emotions and choices with too many mind too many voices

    I have no spine and I gave away my soul I'm starved n slaved but my mouth stays full

    I pray for him and me for every human being the sarrow wares the feathers thin on my wing

    this weight is baring my aura is taring my temples flaring the voice blairing people keep just walking by staring

    what

    I'm here on my knees I cry out with plea's I have a dieases that I even believe in these plea's I wish it would sease and sist but with out prayer I stay pist

    constant judgment more then parnet I just can't bare it but If I share it I will fall into shades of grey for long periods to stay this choice I just can't sway for it to be all on display

    so all I can say is pray for me and pray for Jp or mabe just show some love for him and me


    felicious ChaZie
    Cha Cha ChaZie

  • #2
    the structure was something different as to how u used u'r words (and rhyme), i think its beautiful.

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    • #3
      thank you for taking the time and droppen feedback
      I like to be different though as long as it blends well

      =*)
      Cha Cha ChaZie

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      • #4
        very well put together

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        • #5
          It semp very uniqie and i like the way you set it out. you semp to epess your feelings loud and clear i realy liked it
          OH HAI!

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          • #6
            good looking out ya'll

            thanks for dropping some feedback much respect
            Cha Cha ChaZie

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            • #7
              really good peom i luv it its fun not much in the ryhming but thats ok it was fine without it.keep it up

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              • #8
                I dont know if your still around miss queen but could you elaborate on whats wrong with the rhyming?


                Originally posted by thepumpkinqueen
                really good peom i luv it its fun not much in the ryhming but thats ok it was fine without it.keep it up
                Cha Cha ChaZie

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                • #9
                  the structure was most definately different.
                  but i liked it for some reason, seemed like it
                  added to the poem. nice work
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                  she borrowed my shoes
                  and noticed, how wore down my;
                  soul has really got

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