Wilted rose (please give me honest opinions)

[user unknown]

Heres the image but if its too hard to read just read the text below

http://tinypic.com/2l1aaf

My heart is like a wilted rose,
I look down in disgrace and cover my face.
Lifeless on the end of my tether,
Love I can no longer endeavour.

My lips are like a summer sunset,
Warm and tender but too distant to touch.
Lusting for that first moment of bliss
But my sun always sets when we kiss.

My eyes are like an angels wings
Tattered and torn, betrayed of all trust.
Glistening when you show me a sign.
Now I know that you'll never be mine.


http://www.d12world.com/board/showthread.php?t=194042
http://www.d12world.com/board/showthread.php?t=191973
http://www.d12world.com/board/showthread.php?t=194455

[Psycho69]

Please read the rules..

First Rule of the Poetry Forum - - Before you post your own poetry, you have to respond to at least two other threads which are not your own. When creating your own thread, post links to the two which you replied.


EDIT: Don't need to roll your eyes, and it's not to keep the admins or mods happy.. it's called a strategy to promote activity in a forum that is in need of it.

[user unknown]

ok

[user unknown]

oh come one somebody?

[sKitelZ]

........wow thats deep!......im really feelen it! Nice work!

[stanssista]

^ i agree, that poem was so emotional, i the end!!


hey soz if uve bin on b4 and ive missed u but skitles i aint seen u online 4 ages, welcome back!!

[user unknown]

thank god i got replies lol i was wondering if it was awful or something.


Thanks guys

[stanssista]

no fuckin way is it awful, it had sum really raw feelin in it

[Drunk Monkey]

What I enjoyed about it was it got str8 to the point.

Too many poems on here are laced with flowery language, but no real meaning lies within them.

This poem had no "filler"........................Good

[user unknown]

I'm weird like that. Sometimes my poems are straight to the point....and sometimes they go on forever lol

[elemental]

it was expressed very well, full of beauty, love and emotion......

[thepumpkinqueen]

it made me think of my 1st kiss 4 some reason...well i never had my 1st kiss...*confused face*well mabe i was just imaging my 1st kiss?...it was really goo d i (U) it..except not a broken heart.lol keep it up-missy