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  • Taken From The Shore

    Taken from the shore
    By enormous wings of grace.
    A warm wind ushers us higher.
    Farwell to the waves below for
    Nothing can stop
    This moment
    From being ours.

    Too many times my tears
    Have filled the ocean.
    So many times the rocks
    Have cut my feet.
    But now
    The sun dries my eyes
    And heals the wounds.

    Wings of grace carry us
    Over the strength of pain.
    A last glimpse of seals
    Frolicking in waves.
    They turn and tumble
    And disappear below.

    Too late to look down.
    We must keep on
    Holding on
    For such power will guide us freely
    To where dandelions grow
    And dreams are no longer dreams.
    Last edited by elemental; 08-24-2005, 11:23 AM.

  • #2
    From the second stanza to the last, i enjoyed the most.

    But, you can basically quote the whole thing.

    This was the best I've seen from you, I think.

    Great job
    Now let the night be dark for all of me.
    Let the night be too dark for me to see
    Into the future. Let what will be, be.'

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    • #3
      oh Shyte that was quick thanken you

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      • #4
        This was a very good poem. I enjoyed most of it, except the first part was not as good for some reason.


        Too many times my tears
        Have filled the ocean.
        So many times the rocks
        Have cut my feet.
        But now
        The sun dries my eyes
        And heals the wounds.

        The second stanza was my favorite.
        no dough ho, you can't fuck with me!

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        • #5
          gooooooood stuff
          i agree second stanza the strongest but i liked the first one as well
          Bored? CHECK IT!
          http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jz1NNr2_dfw

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          • #6
            it was good, was it supose to be like a song
            OH HAI!

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            • #7
              ^ not at all gap2gap

              thnx for the feedback

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              • #8
                hey gurl....I wasn't going to reply to anything (I'm sick)...but I saw your poem and had to check it out. I am duely surprised and impressed. It's not your typical style of writing at all. Compared to some of your previous works, it seems as if you have found closure and a better sense of peace for some old wound. I could be wrong though. I have noticed that even your personal quote has changed, too. All I got to say is way to go! You did wonderfully.
                Life is what you make it.

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                • #9
                  like i said i ur rep its gr8 to see ya on the board....the quote is somthing Barbara Streisand said on Oprah........its aweseom huh!

                  thnx for the mentoring & feadback (K)

                  take it easy (D)

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