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    well this is my first actuall go at it..this took me like only 2 minutes to write so....what the fuck...

    crying isn't even an issue no more
    an eternity of tears on the floor
    tears fall, what to do?
    you tell me, I'll tell you
    Bucket overflowing
    still no one knowing
    my lifes on the tracks
    but the trains still going
    not to be arrogant
    but is this made you hurt
    imagine the next verse......


    ok I know it isn't very good...but I did it quick and I have more tell me if u think it is good enough for more..thanks..
    I know what you did don't try to undo it, Fuck me and you don't try to renew it, I put faith in you and you just blew it, you kept love alive for me now I'm like screw it...

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    It was okay. Especially if that was really your first try. Keep writing. Practice will make you better.
    no dough ho, you can't fuck with me!

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