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    I Hate You!


    Donít pose as a rock then shatter like glass,
    Because your image wonít last, and people will just laugh at your stupid ass.
    Iím waiting for your mental crash, I wanna see some rash irrational actions in mass.
    To push past your stash of moments that are just so vast,
    What is that rash on your lips.. is that herpes?
    You quirky curvy bitch better get tested before others throw you to the curb you stupid turkey.
    Now we know your psychotic,
    And that no antibiotic can fix the nutty tick,
    That switches in you brain from being innocent to erotic.
    If you donít wanna give it, then donít flaunt it,
    Unless you want to be grabbed and then haunted,
    From the image that is burned in you head,
    That lead you to portray yourself as the victim, instead,
    Of the girl that should have seen it coming,
    Or seen a warning sign or something,
    Your not cunning, your becoming the girl that is dumb,
    Who let rum be the open door for scum to put their thumb in your fuckin bum.

    Its works for me, to have a verbal tourney, to turn everybody into silly puddy, molding what they think, first Iíll make you feel extinct, and understand that I can make everything go my way, because I have a knack to persuade people to listen to what I say.
    I cannot live day by day, Iíll secure my future until my hair turns gray. And you will not be in my life come a year, I donít wanna give off the image of fear, I just want to express that your not welcomed here, What I say, I mean, its true, so hello, goodbye, and by the wayÖfuck you.
    Last edited by REPUBLICAN; 08-28-2005, 02:11 PM.
    You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
    When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

  • #2
    man that was hot i could really fel you on this, keep the work up
    OH HAI!

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    • #3
      thanks for the feedback, more is comin
      You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
      When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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      • #4
        that was heat and that line with "herpes" almost made me laught cry.......
        naw waite..........the whole fucking verse was funny and kinda witty at times,I liked it also taught it was real original too and the flow was good but overall it was very well structured and consistent

        Keep up the good work homie
        Lyrical Underground Assassin King

        XEXAK

        X-Traordinarily Exotic X-Treme AssassinatinKingz




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        • #5
          thanks for the feedback Terrence...when im angry, it makes writing so much easier, and especially if there is someone who is a bitch, it makes it THAT much easier...lol thanks man
          You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
          When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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          • #6
            Nice. I liked it a lot, it was unique. Good job

            ~RIP Proof~
            They say the good die young...


            http://www.one.org/Addmyvoice.aspx

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            • #7
              thanks dirtydozen122... glad to hear some nice feedback!
              You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
              When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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              • #8
                i love this poetry section, even tho my work is more rap than poetry, its great to read the emotions on paper...wish more people would go to this section..
                You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
                When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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                • #9
                  any more comments?
                  You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
                  When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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